Thank you for catching that added detail, as I didn't realize I'd made that oopsie. 😅 I always welcome constructive feedback when it comes to stories, as I am a writer. It's something I'm serious about. So, I'm curious, which other parts were "reiterated"? I looked for them, but they didn't jump out at me right away. Anyway, thank you for your feedback and kind words. It is much appreciated!
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Nothing as apparant. I'm just a lil hyper aware of moments that can be infered instead of stated since I've been working on that myself. Examples: the prince being betrothed to her, feeling her cold hands was much more impactful than saying she looked cold because her arms were crossed, and the castle coming under attack/her holding her head to a loud sound was kind of clunky. Nit picks mostly, but I DID absolutely love the way you lead into the reveal with clues and subtley!