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I chopped it and chopped it and chopped it again. In the end I was just happy it fit on one page. 

Solid characterization, some nice bits of wisdom in here, and the story itself rings true. Well written and on target. 

Solid characterization, some nice bits of wisdom in here, and the story itself rings true. Well written and on target. 

Very well done. Compelling is a great word for this. It doesn't hurt that I'm a big fan of the soul snatchers either. So I was rooting for the Apostle from the beginning. It's rare to read something that works this well in such a brief format. 

Definitely creative resources. And I liked the atmosphere. This would be a great Halloween story. There were some rough spots here, but overall, nice work!

You have the seeds of something really interesting here. I really like the concept. And it is an interesting take on the theme. It needs a good edit and some rewrites, but it was a fun read non the less!

This was an intriguing concept, almost a horror story by the vibes. I good job at making the faction seem alien. It could use a solid edit and there is something off about the formatting. But overall, well done. 

Interesting characters, a fun tale, and something different about this one that stood out. Well done. The story was warm and the characters memorable. I ship them.

This one was unusual. I wasn't sure about the second person writing, but the story itself was great and really won me over. You successfully created a little slice of OPR mythology. 

This one was unusual. I wasn't sure about the second person writing, but the story itself was great and really won me over. You successfully created a little slice of OPR mythology. 

Excellent use of the theme, and great atmosphere building over such a short span. I liked everything about this. 

Excellent use of the theme, and great atmosphere building over such a short span. I liked everything about this. 

Great concept. A story like this is hard to build up in a single page. I think you have some great bones here though. And the world building is solid. Good work!

This one had a great feel too it. I'm not a fan of the cliffhanger ending though! Which you can take to mean that I was vested in the story, which is not easy to do in one page. Kudos. 

I really liked the "otherness" of the main character. It added a feel to the psyhackers that we haven't really seen yet, while clearly existing in the OPR universe. Nice work!

This one needs a couple of editing passes for verb tense and such. But the concept is really neat.  

Interesting characters, and played against type. This was a fun read. 

Glory days indeed. This was a really heartfelt story for such a short format. I'm rooting for this guy and his farm. 

One of my favorites so far! Perfect use of the theme. And good characterization having only a page to work with. 

Some excellent world building here. 

I loved the turn. Excellent use of the theme and a fun tone change that wasn't abrupt. 

Fantastic characterization. I want more of the main protagonist in future stories!

I had the same thought when I read up to point of the problem. Well done. We need more machine cult stories like these around here. 

Thank you. I had a quite a bit more written up for this but had to leave it due to page length. Perhaps this will get a fuller treatment at some point!

Thank you! I had to leave a bunch of description and characterization on the cutting room floor. I agree with you entirely. 

Thanks!

Ha! Thank you!

You managed the dark tone very well. Quite a bit of story woven into one page. 

This was a fun read and very on theme. Well done!

Thanks! I wanted a real boots on the ground feeling.

Thank you!

Thank you! I want to flesh out the rest of the story.

Excellent work! You really captured the feel of the setting. 

Well done. Rarely do we see the perspective of the conscripts. Red Star!