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Hey bro, I don't think I got my point across properly! I didn't find it boring in the slightest - I literally came back to it multiple times, which says it all really.

To be clear: the mix set the bar so high that this is now the standard I'm measuring everything else against. Simply amazing work on that front.

On composition - I never said it was bad or unpleasant to listen to. There are some structural choices I think could elevate it further, and a few details that felt more like direct DOOM references than your own take on it. Like around the 1 min mark, that synth design and motif - the song didn't need it, you could have used the guitar to get the same emotion or even better, it took a bit of my immersion in the song.
Even if you want it to make an ode to DOOM with that specific instrument / timbre you could picked a further placement in the song.
That's what I mean, small details, not the song as a whole.  I actually think production wise you caught the feeling of Mick without copycatting, which I believe to be extremely hard.

And honestly? With production this good, the composition deserves to match that level. The structure is solid, but I'd easily sit through an 8 min version if you added another wave of sonic explosions before the finish. Composition improvements and high listenability aren't mutually exclusive - and the listenability here is already very high.

Loved your track, I really adore the composition, but had some mixed feelings halfway through the song, there is a passage midway that feels off, but the second half sounds like just the perfect weird. Damn i'm not finding the correct words in english to describe this, might get back to this xD
I liked the execution, but I think you might need some slightly better placement.
Amazing, take care :)

Loved the pacing, it was long, good long though, the thing I was not sure if you tried to capture both scenes on this one track or not, so I have some fixed feelings on the compostion and correlation to theme.
Love the sound desing, an excellent execution overall!
Great track, take care :)

Hey there, this sounded awesome! Although one of my compositions so far, I think the start of the song need some texture, ok to start that way, but I believe it woul benefit the entire composition. That ending was just wonderfull, caught me of guard on how big it all felt, which I believe makes this very fitting for the theme.
Execution was pretty good! 
Another wonderfull work! Take care :)

Damn I think you nailed the theme, the song took me though quite a journey. The composition felt top-notch, the right emotion / feeling every step of the song, goosebumps on that 3:10 passage!
Not sure on the execution, its fine overall, but it depends on the intention, if this is for a PS1 game, awesome, if its for something more modern, we gotta get some reverb work. But most instruments found theyr space, I would maybe wide it a lil bit, maybe some Haas effect would do the trick.
Loved it! Take care :)

Lovely, listening to this was a true Doom meets Pendulum experience. The execution is near perfect, i did wish some guitar riffs had a bit more presence, i feel there was too much of everything, so the song never lets you rest to much, its full of information but some didn't get the required spotlight in my view. But really an amazing job, the mix itself is WOW, and the volume you got with no clear loss in dynamics is wonderfull. For the composition I think it lacked a bit,I personally think there is something missing between the middle calmer part and the ending, and sorry for the honesty in this next regard, but a few elements felt like Doom rip off, instead of Doom  inspired. But still a great track, even gave it a like in Soundcloud to save to listen once in a while, but the production was so good, I'd like to feel it was more you in the composition.
Terrific job! Take care :)

Nice track, 

I felt the mix needed more space, everything seems very compressed, regarding the atmosphere and composition, I digged the creepy vibe, there some weird harmonies and dissonants there, not all worked, but the for the ones that did I think it was worth the risk when composing, so I have that mixed feeling.

Good submission! Take care :)

A great ambient track, really well set atmosphere, very good spatial mix and sound design!

I was hoping to get a bit more movement at a point, but the composition holds up tight for ambient!

Great submission! Take care :3

Really cool track! I love the atmosphere and tension it makes one feel.

I just have some mixed feelings on the percussion, I like it on the beginning of the track when it first comes in, but by the end it felt a bit out of place.

Great submission! Take care :3

Got a bit lost with the link there, but any way good track!

I think you could tweek some stuff in the mix and sound design, some stuff is too forward and a bit harsh too.

Composition wise, I liked it, but the drums drew me off a litle bit, better pacing and placing, also tweek the sound a bit, its too distracting.

Good submission! Take care :)

Good sense of atmosphere, I'd say to pace it a bit slower and create more space, it feels a lil busy at parts.
Sometimes less is more ;)

Good job! Take care :)

Damn, I believe this one will be my pick for the jam.

Great sense of atmosphere overall, flawless use of percussion elements, honestly Sand and Towers is an amazing track, its one of the best ambient tracks I personally heard, and i mean outside the jam, so congrats!

I would question some sound design choices on the second track, It's not the mix, that is pretty top notch, but I feel quite a loss of intensity from one to the other, but of course this could have been your intention all along (all long, all along), but with no referreance to it on the description I had to point it out.

Anyway, amazing submission! Take care :3

I believe this to be the most ambiental of the orchestral pieces I heard so far, really good sense of atmosphere.

I love the song progression and some keys caught me off guard each is always a pleasant experience :)

Mixing is pretty tight, but I think some texturing might be missing, instrument spacing is tight, but needs some more vibrance?

Amazing job! Take care :)

What a sub Jiggy, damn.
The Frozen Waste and The Horizon Fractures, damn boi!

I liked all the tracks, but not all seem ambient, 1st one seemed like tomb raider menu song wach I loved, althgough I found the srings to be to much in your face and took me of the vibe.

Execution is good, but in some songs the strings are to much in the spotlight in my opinion, and instruments a bit harsh overall, maybe overcompressed, which does not help the sense of atmosphere

Great job! Take care :3

Nice work! Themewise this was an aproach I was not expecting, but it seems to fit well with the painting!

I think you need some work done on it to really get it to be an ambient track, I felt some lack of sense of atmosphere, I'm guessing just a few texturing here and there, the composition itself seems fit for the genre

Great work! Take care :)

Amazing pieces!

I wouldn't classify part 1 as ambient tho, but as an OST orchestral piece just hits it perfectly.
I think the mix could use some work, but mostly around the low-mids, probably compression issues, not that its totally out there, but for the feel you went I beliee there might be a bit too much,

Composition is very very good, I always like storytelling aproaches.

Great job! Take care :3

Awesome atmosphere feeling, really loved the passage at 1:35, really amazing!

I think mix and sound design are awesome, but I would move some of the textures more to the "back", but this aint even a "critique" just a personal choice

One of my favorites of the jam, keep it up!

Great job, take care :3

The shift middle song got me thinking this were two tracks, bold transition!
Really loved the first half of the song, completely immersed.

The mix and use of percussion are one of the best I heard so far in the jam!

Great job! take care :)

Very sci-fish for the theme in my opinion, kind of a  wandering feeling, not as much lost ship wreck.

I think the mix could use some work, it should improve the sense of atmosphere.

Good job! Take care :)

Waht an ear candy of a wonderfull piece of music, congrats, it's beautiful!

The only thing is that it doesn't quite fit my concept of ambiance, a bit too busy, and more emotional than atmosphery

Great job tho!! Take care :)

Really enjoyed the submission, I think it would have benefited from a slower pace and lower tone(mostly on the first track), but mixing and composition are on spot, barely noticed the switch between tracks flawless transition id say!

Good job! Take care :)

Nice piece but felt the a atmosphere a bit lacking, the mix is a bit harsh at times and I'd believe you should give more space to the instruments.
Really enjoyed the composition and it kinda fits the painting!

Good job, take care :)

Really enjoyed the piano and the texturing, really nice orchestral with good atmosphere!

Great submission! Take care :3

Really enjoyed the outro of the song!
It's  aa nice piece but I felt some room and heavyness(bass), maybe the synth (although awesome tone) were not the best fo the painting.
Some harshness in the mix mix too, maybe that took a bit from the sense of atmosphere too.

Good job! Take care :)

This is an unreasonbly good track! But I don't feel this as ambient, the sound design and mix are top notch, but there is just too much of everything going on, its hard to get trully immersed.

Great song! Take care :) 

Good lo-fi jam, very chill, not very ambient but still a good sense of atmosphere.
Not really what I'd correlate with the theme, but its not completely out there.
Good mix and although I'd love to see a bit of differentn movement the loop still holdsup.

Good job! Take care :)

Good song man, a bit too busy for ambient in my opinion, but I think its just the arpegio in the back, maybe give it some verb, throw it in the back and automate for it to ondulate a little bit, I think that might work, the rest of the track seems right on point!

Tae care! :)

Exceptionally produced, great job!

I love the intro, and think it was a very creative aproach to the theme, the drums took me off the "vibe" at first , but it just grooved :)

Great submission! Take care

Interesting approach no doubt, but I think it would be a better fit for this theme just an exploration of the middle part of the song.
Also some instruments seem to be fighting a bit and a bit harsh, but maybe its to give the 8-bittish feel.

Good job, take care :)

Wow, this one is on my my favorites for sure!
Very tight mix and very cinematic / cult movie vibe!

Amazing sub, take care :3

Amazing use of foley on the track,  not as easy as it seems to pull of.

Some instruments imaging could be improved in the mix.

I could see this for the begining of a cutscene, I do fear that the foley is too essential to the track, not just texturing the sound, so as an amb track for a game it could not work as well, other than a intro cutscene to something.
Even the ending of the piece sugests it almost as an "intro"to something else.

But I see you went for more of storytelling approach, I do love that!

Good job, take care :)

Great feel of atmosphere and very well paced, for someone's 1st experience with ambiance I'd expect a much busier composition, furtunately you nailed it!

You used the wind samples very well, I've heard some others that weren't able to pull that off, and I do love a well used sample, but in this case, I see the amb track for a game, the wind FX will be there, what you need is something for the background to maintain atmosphere when its not, but not be the game atmosphere itself (hope I'm getting the point across well)

Great submission! Take care :3

I think the tracks biggest issue is the sounddesign/mixing, you don't have a great feel of atmosphere because the sound has no body, I think trying to make that with the wind sound didn't help, maybe many octaves lower and a drone would worked way better.

Also the track is a bit busy but I really enjoyed some of the piano lines, I see great potential in this!

Good job, take care!

Really enjoyed the song it self, but sometimes it feels to busy and takes you away from the ambience and immersion.

Composition is good I liek the progressions and melodies, in the mixing side I felt soem freq fights and some instruments a bit too loud in my gear.

Great job, take care :)

Damn I love that initial build up, very well done!
Mixing sounds great in my gear!

The track has a very good sense of atmosphere, but I never had the feeling of being "lost" in the song, maybe the war drums pacing for too long in the song, not sure, beacause the pad chord prog and  timbre/sound feels fit for sailors lost in a freezing sea

Anyway amazing job! Take care :3

I'd not classify this as ambient, you could have pulled it off with some minor changes, actually could had been something interesting, even if not very correlated with the theme.

I think the voice added nothing, honestly completely threw me off, I couldn't finnish the song.

I'd explore that track and turn it into something diferent, there sure is some potencial in there, and the mix is not bad, so keep grinding :)

Take care!

I think this a solid job, and mixing wise for the time you made ityou can be proud, very coherent and controlled.
This has a industrial vibe and got ya some extra points on creativity, I get some silent hill vibes, I would have expanded "Rough" a lil bit, it has a lot going on, making it longer and more spaced between motif would be cool IMO

Thank you for sharing, good job! Take care :3

Certainly not what I was expecting from the image and being ambient and all, but I did like it, from the title I could imagine this as the track for a Metal Slug lvl
I think you have some uncontroled freq. (maybe the bass/synth) not sure, but first listen kinda hurt my ears a bit
Good job, thank you for sharing! Take care :)

Wow what well spent 14min, just wonderfull work!

The end of destruction is just so much, I felt the hairs in my arm start to spike (which always a good sign) probably my fav section, although your consumation was also one of the best interpretation I've hear in the jam, kudos mate! Desolation's middle part caught me a bit of guard, but I really enjoyed it and you manage to bring it down again jus perfectly

I have nothing to say about your mix, just on point one of the best in the jam too, if you ever wanna give some pointers i'm all ears :D

You ended up being my last one, thats what I call (as we say in my homeland) "acabar em grande"!

Great job, take care :3

Cool track! I think you captured the feeling for the painting

Mix and composition were really good, mostly that airy drone really gave it a feeling of desolation, one thing that seemed to be missing a bit was a bigger low end, other than that tops

Great job, take care :3