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Viability : It's a complete story!

Presentation : Very well presented! I knew what things were without illustrations but could be fun with them too!

Engagement : I thought the Hazbin Hotel joke was funny! I did the choice to buy the yaoi at Newbury LMAO. I didn't know what some of the other brands were but that wasnt too much of a big deal.

Theme : Very fun theme! Not too many consequences in the game but it was a fun story and didn't quite feel like it needed dire stakes.

Overall very fun!

Viability : Feels like a very complete game! 

Presentation : I understand everything thats happening. This game is very relatable cause this is what I deal with all the time lol. This game is very anxiety provoking cause this is basically just my life.

Engagement : I felt engaged and loved the little descriptions! I personally would maybe consider other routes than concluding with ONLY the quicktime event. Or other routes to make it easier? I found it a bit too challenging (or I'm just bad) but I wish there were maybe other ways to get a positive ending?  I never got one :( This could maybe just be a preference thing for me and other people love that part, thats fine! You also may not have time to change that this late and thats ok!

Theme : Love the illustrations and color scheme! Very satisfying game to look at. Your art is so good.

Made me hungry. I'd love BLT with chipolte mayo and swiss. 11/10. (don't play on an empty stomach).

Very cute, short, wholesome game that reminds me of the example Twine game Space Frog! Sometimes keeping it short and sweet is ok and I think it works here but more could be added if you wish.

Viability: Definitly has a start, middle, and end!

Presentation: Very vivid descriptions, could perhaps benefit from illustrations if u have the time.

Theme: Love the story! Love the theme! Very wholesome. Would play this if I need a feel-good game.

Engagement: I felt invested in my choices, but perhaps some more options to make the griffin feel better when you make a bad choice, even if for rp or personal satisfaction purposes? When I accidentally spilt the water and made their affliction worse I felt so so bad- like when you accidentially step on your pets foot and have to hug them and apologize for an hour straight.

Overall: Very fun. Would name my griffin Peter.

I think you have a really strong start! I overheard the plot and wanted to give it a try. I love the theme! Concept, characters, world, all very strong! I love Chamomile!! I felt engaged in my choices especially talking with them. The game is well presented as I can clearly see the narrative. If you have the time or come back to this in the future I’d love to see some art, maybe chat expressions for talking with Chamomile? When it’s finished I’m sure the game will be more viable. Had fun with your wip regardless! 

Game is viable! Love the fantasy theme! I like that things like headphones still exist in a world of knights. Don't change that lol. I felt engaged in the story and invested in my choices. My only main crit is with presentation of challenges, I'm wondering how I failed? I was not presented with materials to study. I wondered if it was because I chose to take the water instead of the armor but when I took the armor I still failed and couldn't go back to a safe checkpoint. I still had fun tho!

Very strong start! Love the theme! The options available are well presented. I felt engaged with my choices. Once it’s finished I’m sure it will be viable and well put together based on what I’ve seen so far.