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Man, its weird to think about how close this is to being finished. Hope you're proud of yourself and all your work Dyne, you really should be!

You have a good start here i didn't notice any glaring flaws or anything though i did notice an odd grammatical mistake, you wrote: "rather sooner then later" a couple of times, it should be: "sooner rather then later" it's a small thing but it reads better.

Other then that you have an interesting premise and so far the characters we've met have been interesting even if we haven't really spoken to them much yet

In the top right corner you'll notice some symbols, the third one along is the save button, press it then you get a menu for multiple saves, on the left side of that menu is more of the same symbols, press one to save. If you want to load a save just press the play button in the same menu next to the save you just made

That was sweet, the story was a little cheesy but like the good kind and the art was excellent, i wasn't too fond of the music or sound's though. 

Rowan is very sweet and charming

All in all I enjoyed it well done 

i'll keep an eye on this for now then, i can see it growing on me as the story continues 

Its an interesting game and i enjoy the world and story but i cant help feeling that the mc is... useless? they lack any form of agency and cant seem to do anything themself, i know they dont understand the world around them but it really feels like you could give the mark to any of the other characters and there would be no point to the mc. also the personality system locks in a little too early for my tastes

No no its fine, your writing is excellent so i'm enjoying it anyway i'm just excited to see what the mc is like as an adult and to see where the story goes.

i just personally dislike playing children 

Much as i love this story i truly cannot wait to stop being a child

Well now, when you mentioned you were already working on something after Viatica i had high hopes, you knocked those hopes out of the water!

Only one chapter and i'm already looking forward to seeing what becomes of our mc and the world at large, i'm looking forward to the next chapter already

This story is truly gripping, it was interesting seeing how the stats changed while the mc hides their natur. And i truly cant wait to see if i'll acually be able to bring peace and unity

Well i'm hooked.

i hope Carter is ok, he and the mc have such a nice dynamic

This is a great game, good job so far.
I did notice a mistake though, people kept calling me "Kay" in chapter 1 despite the fact i chose not to have a nickname and used a different name then Kota

That would be appreciated.

about the game itself though: i played the original dashingdon version and thoroughly enjoyed it so i was glad to stumble upon it here as well (i may or may not just be fully inlove with A)

you might want to add a way to reset the game it would be nice to play through it again and make different choices, see how things would be different