Cool game! The artwork was very good! It's always hard to do that challenge but I think you pulled it off! Nice and creepy!
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I love the art style. I like the idea of a single image that you can scroll through but the problem is that the text goes by so fast and the scrolling of the picture is so fast it hurts the eyes as well as makes it hard to read comfortably. I'm a slow reader so maybe that's just me. Definitely needs more to it but it was nice of you to share your practice work.
The wording is very telling rather than showing with you the creator as the focus rather than the story.
You need to switch your focus to the game itself. Sell me the story. For example your opening line "The story talks about a recruit who's the offspring of two different races, your goal is to find out to which race he belongs to and win the imminent war." Remove "the story talks about". Then you need to get rid of the passive voice and make me feel interested. Try something like "The imminent war must be won and the only one who can stop it is you, a recruit who's the offspring of the two different races at odds."
Do you see what I mean? I hope that helps you.
Wow really nice! I love the background. I can't help but feel like the guy's clothes aren't shaded in the same style though. His legs especially are looking pillow shaded. I think. I feel like his legs below the knee would be darker than the thigh, so probably the highlight at the top shouldn't carry all the way down the leg like that.
Looks pillow shaded. You'd improve by figuring out where your light source is. Most games have light in the upper left. Right now it looks like the light is directly in the center but at the same time the top is lighter than the bottom. It's super cute though! Also don't be afraid to shade the outline lines themselves.
This game was truly adorable! I loved all the little details like the hand coming out to steal the word lunch. It was really funny and I loved playing through all the endings. I loved the humor. Please keep making games!