It's not your fault that payment processors are enforcing censorship
If you do end up removing your work please do reupload it for access again if possible - I say this out of selfishness because it breaks my heart when IF games become lost media 🥹
I don't recall making a comment for this IF yet so it's time it gets another positive review because the author deserves it!
I love the lore involving the fae and the supernatural - I love the MC relationship to (BAMF DILF) Carter LOL but seriously I think it's super sweet and I love the dynamic of an adoptee parent taking on a child with "baggage" (supernatural powers, unknown past, etc)
The RO's are distinct and I'd love to romance each one - the kestrel is incredibly compelling (which if that isn't fitting for a fae character idk what is) but my heart has chosen Renard and I'll stick to my lovely witch
SMALL SPOILERS FOR CHAPTER 7
I'm curious how many readers chose the deal with the kestrel or not - and how big of a consequence or reward they'll get from that action (I chose to accept and revealing that to everyone was actually so nerve wracking as if I was the MC lol - but again Carter was a sweet dad)
I'm noticing throughout your other comments for IF/visual novels this genre just might not be your thing
Or you just purposely like going against the stated objective of the story and then throwing your hands up like "but my CHOICES!? shouldn't I get a CHOICE just code it in there developer it's not like it'd be taking time/effort for something else"
So I recommend to stop seeing interactive fiction like games and start seeing it as interactive fiction that wants to tell a story and within that story you can direct the outcome for your character (and no actively wanting to choose to go against the story doesn't make you interesting or is a valid choice - it makes you a typical annoying DND player that gets upset when the party moves on because you don't want to join the carriage ride to save the world)
I'm always excited and in love with what blood-teeth writes and if it is possible to make a selfish request please even if you wish not to continue this story in the future if there's any chance you could leave it up and not have it deleted id be so happy
For the prologue itself the writing is so deeply poignant and conveys so much feeling with as little time it truly has (I especially love the sequence detailing memories and wants the astronaut longs for) it's all so good I'll probably read it over again❤️
Very promising and I love it! im so excited to pursue Kelsey the loser geek x popular jock (and one that's in a "relationship") is just to good to pass by for mc (im especially curious how it'll go when roles are swapped)
Also a bit funny but while playing I decided to do chores so I had a nice cackle when I read this
Your Episode 1 runtime was 01:16:55 (1 hours, 16 minutes, and 55 seconds).
I'm completely blown away by the depth and the writing! I couldn't say no to bringing Checl with me (my MC is gonna need someone optimistic and kind for a whole lot of pain he's probably gonna put himself and others through LOL) also related but I love my sweet puppy (I named him Good Boy because that's what he is while being a terrifying beast 🥺)
And I'm very curious how the future encounter with Tsering will go (as of this point my MC just wants to shoot him in the leg and push him off a bridge - you don't get the amount of past vulnerability shown to you without a price LOL) I know we got some lovers of him currently tho so maybe that'll change~
Yes! If you search IF games anything interactive fiction will show up
Also I would sorta be repeating myself but since Lunan said they've recently thought about selling the full game and writing with that goal in mind I'll leave that discussion and thought process for them (lord knows I'm never gonna make an IF myself lol)
I will say the last few parts of your criticisms seem highly unnecessary - because the IF is currently free (and free games or books etc. will be quite unprofessional) also most IF authors I've seen who charge anything have a patreon (that the author doesn't have) which you opt into for bonus content
The most I've seen an IF go for is 12$ (I think authors deserve more but that's besides the point) and that's on the high end
Which is all to say whatever prices the author 'would' charge you'd get about what you'd pay for but the author isn't charging anything so it's not worth speculating on
Honestly with all the criticisms in the comments I was expecting more of a bite to this IF lol
Overall I like it I actually think the companions can be quite nice in their own ways despite reading comments saying their only mean - like Nash off the bat is a sweetheart - in the beginning Leanna is just trying to work things out in the moment to survive so she comes off as "harsh" but literally right after Rohan is being a prick (which they fully send him off as to break off the tension) she comes to the MC and directly shows cares for how they feel
The alien (sorry can't remember their name) is stand offish but it's shown they clearly have a good heart 1) because their being hunted/exiled from their kind and 2) they show a clear care for joia's whole being and they even explain their reasoning for not trusting us at the start which the MC shares mutually back because their an alien lol
I like Rohan as a character I think he's the foil to the MC and it could be the Luka alien stage lover in me but I like that bit of toxicity - I recall seeing a comment asking why anyone would ever romance him and its the same reason people play IF where you can be a murderer/villain - and as a sidenote I felt like the whole "surgery" and forced tranquilizer was way more traumatizing then the intercourse (but maybe its diff if you dont choose to sleep with rohan I'll have to see)
so good your writing has my stomach in knots sometimes I cant get enough man and I love having my stubborn lil man tell flea to stay like his puppy dog earnest is something the incubus cant say no to LOL
as a sidenote im really happy I was able to guess the culprit for the new case idk made me feel a lil smart
Oh haha I was not expecting to see the IF here but it's a very happy surprise!! I still really like this story (idk if you'd recall me author but I was the anon on Tumblr who problem solved the riddle section using Google doc LOL -)
Also I recall you liking sunflowers? So here's one for you 🌻 ty again for publishing your story here
Writing this to say to all the people in the comments 'mourning' over this wip
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