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Reading this all over again and omg im in love - the character relationships (familial, friendly, blossoming on romance) not just with mc but the people around them is so GOOD

I think the exploritive options for how they feel and contexualize trauma, love, sadness, etc. As a child can be so heartwrenching but also puts into perspective how small and sheltered they can be in their perspective (both being a child and being hidden away)

Idk where to put this but Sage is so intriguing as a RO and who is currently my favorite- I love how possesive they can be (and pointedly recognizing it within himself) i like how to mc sage "domain" is both a safe space but not an actual place to belong (mc cant stay they forever - nor should they! But wouldn't it be nice just being so safe and cared for unconditionally...)

There's more I could say but ill end my ramble there ty for the amazing update!

Thankyou for your hardwork I can't wait to read on steam ♥️♥️♥️

"thank you for your patience" no author THANKYOU! I'm so excited to read Nour's route but that wouldn't be possible without your dedication and your want to write about this story in the first place

I loved Rubens I know I'll love theirs too so thankyou !! <3

Im all for werewolf found family mystery and romance - and this story seems to be setting up all three which makes me excited for future updates 

thankyou for the reply! That definitely clears up a few things (because don't get me wrong I'm always for sex/sexual aspects in IF() but I didn't see how that being our work would play into the big picture lol but now I def see how each job will contribute to our skills beyond how they seem on the surface level (like subterfuge) 

And it all definitely sounds very expansive and intense but I know if you do this story it'll be awesome 

(As a side note a more darker/toxic found family is so yummy)

In order of which story I both liked and would want to see continued (my thoughts and concerns are written on each separate post) 

1 Lab Rat

2 Daddy was a Killer

3 Lost to Time

4 The Howl

5 Moonlight Protocol

Thankyou for all the demos author! And I hope whatever story you end up choosing you have fun with

I wouldnt say im starved for sci-fi content, as its not a genre I actively seek out. But for this IF I'd definitely be interested in learning more.

The things I like, the team (you always write interesting and lovable team dynamics.) And I can already tell this will also delve into some found family tropes, I would be so excited to meet the rest.

  Seeing as the MC will be apart of the group, (ik it's said they can get a job and a planet to live on,  but I have a good guess they will stay with the crew.) I think the stories direction is heading into stoping more crime maybe with separate missions and navigating what it means to be in the future, and I'd be totally down for that while meeting more cool aliens along the way.

This one is super interesting !!

the things I like - the dynamic of the team and their bond with the MC (traumabonded!!!! :D I'm mainly joking) but it's really sweet, how much they care for one another and them, the romance I think would hit really well. I love the mystery surrounding the MC's bsckstory, even when we peek into our own files. There's still so many delicious questions,  like why are we the sole survivor,  who killed everyone, who were our parents, what exactly were we being tested for?. It's so interesting!!

I love the hint at the somewhat recovery the MC has made, and how realistic it feels. Idk where to put this but ACE is the goat I have a soft spot for sentient AI that want to protect their humans well being (especially when he expressed concern over not censoring the footage or the MC reaction to the cages)

This one def goes in the top spot

I really really liked this one

The parts I liked most was the world building, it was done so well in giving small quips/ highlighting how androids of MC caliber would work in human society. (Specifically the section of it being illegal for androids to work human jobs,) and the comment about the android that jumped from the bridge, while also talking about the common fear in robot media of a takeover.

I like the potential for this one in the "human" introspection that the MC will get, and I love that despite not even hearing the benefactor initially , or knowing what they look like. We get a sense that what they allowed MC to do is in no way normal, or cost efficient.  I think the MC and Amor's relationship would be so interesting and I'd totally be down to see their romance

My main concern is the ending note of " I enjoy this idea, but it doesn’t spark enough joy for me, really. " so I think out of all the stories I will move this one to the bottom of my list on which one to pursue, I want an IF author to be equally invested/having fun in their stories with the reader. 

Similar to the previous comment im a bit biased on IF that focus more on the mc internally, and I think the writing in this one is already hitting an emotional depth id love to see explored.

The thing's I liked in this one, MC has a clear goal thats tied to them (to be normal - to remember their past - to be able to see their kid) and I like how more down to earth this storyline is (its dark but grounded) and I think the characters that are introduced all have a clear reason as to why the MC has their attention and what role they might play in the future. (Whether it be emotional support - a hint at the past thats returned whether MC likes it or not - or as allies ) 

My only concern is that I don't want you getting burnt out with how heavy the customization might be - especially with IF that deal in mental health and MC's internal/external thoughts along with character relationships it can make an author feel like they need to cover/write for every little nuance.

First time reading - after I finish the rest I plan to come back to see if my opinion has changed 

The thing I like most about this IF is finding hope/found 'family' in a place full of depravity (which I think is what this story is going for), I thought it was funny that my question of "does this involve werewolves?" Got called out lol. But I'm all for a mafia/gangster vibe 

Something I'm unsure about that is making me hesitate on giving my thumbs up for this IF, is that I can't tell how the story/chapters would work? Like will there be an overarching gang war thats kinda hinted at,  will it be MC being given a singular job and we just see the insights of that, will MC be going through multiple different mini (dark) storylines with different characters they can choose to be in a team with. I'm just not sure yet if this story is trying to be more worldbuilding focused with how the gangs work (with like factions and leaders and jobs and maybe how it all plays in the  real world) more mc focused really diving in and fleshing out any of the backstories and their impact, like would they use the resources they get for revenge? Would that be a big plot point. Or character focus, where we spend more time learning why each character chose this life, chose to stay. And thats where the found family stuff comes in 

Maybe a mix of multiple? 

Anyway just my general rambling thoughts for now!

It's not your fault that payment processors are enforcing censorship

If you do end up removing your work please do reupload it for access again if possible - I say this out of selfishness because it breaks my heart when IF games become lost media 🥹

The notifications are going through but it's so heartbreaking how MasterCard and other payment providers can enforce censorships

AUTHOR AUTHOR 

GET BACK HERE AND EXPLAIN 

AUTHORRRERRRRRRRR

(I say all this with love that update is so evil LOL) 

I'm so sorry to hear the loss of your mother I'm glad you were able to spend time with her before she passed

I'm sure it's already been said but if you ever need to take another break don't feel guilty and prioritize yourself first! And whenever a new update for mending is posted I'll be there 🩷

 this is all to say consider supporting the author on Patreon! 

I don't recall making a comment for this IF yet so it's time it gets another positive review because the author deserves it!

I love the lore involving the fae and the supernatural - I love the MC relationship to (BAMF DILF) Carter LOL but seriously I think it's super sweet and I love the dynamic of an adoptee parent taking on a child with "baggage" (supernatural powers, unknown past, etc)

The RO's are distinct and I'd love to romance each one - the kestrel is incredibly compelling (which if that isn't fitting for a fae character idk what is) but my heart has chosen Renard and I'll stick to my lovely witch

SMALL SPOILERS FOR CHAPTER 7

I'm curious how many readers chose the deal with the kestrel or not - and how big of a consequence or reward they'll get from that action (I chose to accept and revealing that to everyone was actually so nerve wracking as if I was the MC lol - but again Carter was a sweet dad)

I'm noticing throughout your other comments for IF/visual novels this genre just might not be your thing

Or you just purposely like going against the stated objective of the story and then throwing your hands up like "but my CHOICES!? shouldn't I get a CHOICE just code it in there developer it's not like it'd be taking time/effort for something else"

So I recommend to stop seeing interactive fiction like games and start seeing it as interactive fiction that wants to tell a story and within that story you can direct the outcome for your character (and no actively wanting to choose to go against the story doesn't make you interesting or is a valid choice - it makes you a typical annoying DND player that gets upset when the party moves on because you don't want to join the carriage ride to save the world)

Very very very promising I really have/want to give this a second playthrough because there's already so many things I want to bite into with the writing and characters 

When I got an email about the new chapter I was so happy!! I can't wait to play this when I'm off work I love this series so much ❤️

I feel bad my silly comment is the only recent thing for this IF lol

So with the update I gave the story a read and I can say that I'm definitely interested! There are some cool aspects at play and the characters are likable w/ clear distinct personalities 

Very fun and with a clear focus on what story it wants to tell 

I am so happy with the revision and new update! I especially think the additions make the writing more evocative in how tragic painful and intriguing the story is

I am hopeful/looking very forward to when the new chapter is to come !

A beautiful rewrite ty author ❤️

I'm always excited and in love with what blood-teeth writes and if it is possible to make a selfish request please even if you wish not to continue this story in the future if there's any chance you could leave it up and not have it deleted id be so happy 

For the prologue itself the writing is so deeply poignant and conveys so much feeling with as little time it truly has (I especially love the sequence detailing memories and wants the astronaut longs for) it's all so good I'll probably read it over again❤️ 

Im definitely excited for what's to come next however I will admit I'm a bit concerned (?) over 9 RO's not even including the poly aspects as well

 if the author thinks they can do it by all means do not listen to me (I am not a writer) I just hope they have fun with their story

This was such a good update also that gifted poisoner ring is such a chekhov gun I'm excited to see where that goes 👀

Im obsessed 

Characters? Love

Angst? LOVE

Also so called free thinkers when the author says not to get attached: 😭😭😭😭(me included)

But in all srs this is so well written and I'm so excited/will patiently waiting for an update

I can't thankyou enough author for telling us this story! It was so beautiful and I hope you have a bright/happy new year 

Have a good break! You have nothing to apologize for 🩷

Also my MC and Taylor having their "I am a girl like you" barbie moment LOL

Very promising and I love it! im so excited to pursue Kelsey the loser geek x popular jock (and one that's in a "relationship") is just to good to pass by for mc (im especially curious how it'll go when roles are swapped)

Also a bit funny but while playing I decided to do chores so I had a nice cackle when I read this 

Your Episode 1 runtime was 01:16:55 (1 hours, 16 minutes, and 55 seconds).

As a sidenote I love the artwork for the species! Very pretty!!

I'm completely blown away by the depth and the writing! I couldn't say no to bringing Checl with me (my MC is gonna need someone optimistic and kind for a whole lot of pain he's probably gonna put himself and others through LOL) also related but I love my sweet puppy (I named him Good Boy because that's what he is while being a terrifying beast 🥺)

And I'm very curious how the future encounter with Tsering will go (as of this point my MC just wants to shoot him in the leg and push him off a bridge - you don't get the amount of past vulnerability shown to you without a price LOL) I know we got some lovers of him currently tho so maybe that'll change~

By no means should you feel bad please but your mental/physical health first before any updates! 

And I hope you have a speedy recovery 🩷

Yes! If you search IF games anything interactive fiction  will show up  

Also I would sorta be repeating myself but since Lunan said they've recently thought about selling the full game and writing with that goal in mind I'll leave that discussion and thought process for them (lord knows I'm never gonna make an IF myself lol)

I will say the last few parts of your criticisms seem highly unnecessary - because the IF is currently free (and free games or books etc. will be quite unprofessional) also most IF authors I've seen who charge anything have a patreon (that the author doesn't have) which you opt into for bonus content 

The most I've seen an IF go for is 12$ (I think authors deserve more but that's besides the point) and that's on the high end 

Which is all to say whatever prices the author 'would' charge you'd get about what you'd pay for but the author isn't charging anything so it's not worth speculating on

Of course and there's no pressure to cater to everyone's taste I'm just excited to see how the story plays out more than anything! 🩷

As a sidenote  I think you'd love the music video "The Greatest living show" 

Works for me now on mobile! I love it I'm so excited for more!! 

I wonder if the mc can be a wolf in sheep's clothing for the circus 🤭

Honestly with all the criticisms in the comments I was expecting more of a bite to this IF lol 

Overall I like it I actually think the companions can be quite nice in their own ways despite reading comments saying their only mean - like Nash off the bat is a sweetheart - in the beginning Leanna is just trying to work things out in the moment to survive so she comes off as "harsh" but literally right after Rohan is being a prick (which they fully send him off as to break off the tension) she comes to the MC and directly shows cares for how they feel 

The alien (sorry can't remember their name) is stand offish but it's shown they clearly have a good heart 1) because their being hunted/exiled from their kind and 2) they show a clear care for joia's whole being and they even explain their reasoning for not trusting us at the start which the MC shares mutually back because their an alien lol

I like Rohan as a character I think he's the foil to the MC and it could be the Luka alien stage lover in me but I like that bit of toxicity - I recall seeing a comment asking why anyone would ever romance him and its the same reason people play IF where you can be a murderer/villain - and as a sidenote I felt like the whole "surgery" and forced tranquilizer was way more traumatizing then the intercourse (but maybe its diff if you dont choose to sleep with rohan I'll have to see)