In order of which story I both liked and would want to see continued (my thoughts and concerns are written on each separate post)
1 Lab Rat
2 Daddy was a Killer
3 Lost to Time
4 The Howl
5 Moonlight Protocol
Thankyou for all the demos author! And I hope whatever story you end up choosing you have fun with
I wouldnt say im starved for sci-fi content, as its not a genre I actively seek out. But for this IF I'd definitely be interested in learning more.
The things I like, the team (you always write interesting and lovable team dynamics.) And I can already tell this will also delve into some found family tropes, I would be so excited to meet the rest.
Seeing as the MC will be apart of the group, (ik it's said they can get a job and a planet to live on, but I have a good guess they will stay with the crew.) I think the stories direction is heading into stoping more crime maybe with separate missions and navigating what it means to be in the future, and I'd be totally down for that while meeting more cool aliens along the way.
This one is super interesting !!
the things I like - the dynamic of the team and their bond with the MC (traumabonded!!!! :D I'm mainly joking) but it's really sweet, how much they care for one another and them, the romance I think would hit really well. I love the mystery surrounding the MC's bsckstory, even when we peek into our own files. There's still so many delicious questions, like why are we the sole survivor, who killed everyone, who were our parents, what exactly were we being tested for?. It's so interesting!!
I love the hint at the somewhat recovery the MC has made, and how realistic it feels. Idk where to put this but ACE is the goat I have a soft spot for sentient AI that want to protect their humans well being (especially when he expressed concern over not censoring the footage or the MC reaction to the cages)
This one def goes in the top spot
I really really liked this one
The parts I liked most was the world building, it was done so well in giving small quips/ highlighting how androids of MC caliber would work in human society. (Specifically the section of it being illegal for androids to work human jobs,) and the comment about the android that jumped from the bridge, while also talking about the common fear in robot media of a takeover.
I like the potential for this one in the "human" introspection that the MC will get, and I love that despite not even hearing the benefactor initially , or knowing what they look like. We get a sense that what they allowed MC to do is in no way normal, or cost efficient. I think the MC and Amor's relationship would be so interesting and I'd totally be down to see their romance
My main concern is the ending note of " I enjoy this idea, but it doesn’t spark enough joy for me, really. " so I think out of all the stories I will move this one to the bottom of my list on which one to pursue, I want an IF author to be equally invested/having fun in their stories with the reader.
Similar to the previous comment im a bit biased on IF that focus more on the mc internally, and I think the writing in this one is already hitting an emotional depth id love to see explored.
The thing's I liked in this one, MC has a clear goal thats tied to them (to be normal - to remember their past - to be able to see their kid) and I like how more down to earth this storyline is (its dark but grounded) and I think the characters that are introduced all have a clear reason as to why the MC has their attention and what role they might play in the future. (Whether it be emotional support - a hint at the past thats returned whether MC likes it or not - or as allies )
My only concern is that I don't want you getting burnt out with how heavy the customization might be - especially with IF that deal in mental health and MC's internal/external thoughts along with character relationships it can make an author feel like they need to cover/write for every little nuance.
First time reading - after I finish the rest I plan to come back to see if my opinion has changed
The thing I like most about this IF is finding hope/found 'family' in a place full of depravity (which I think is what this story is going for), I thought it was funny that my question of "does this involve werewolves?" Got called out lol. But I'm all for a mafia/gangster vibe
Something I'm unsure about that is making me hesitate on giving my thumbs up for this IF, is that I can't tell how the story/chapters would work? Like will there be an overarching gang war thats kinda hinted at, will it be MC being given a singular job and we just see the insights of that, will MC be going through multiple different mini (dark) storylines with different characters they can choose to be in a team with. I'm just not sure yet if this story is trying to be more worldbuilding focused with how the gangs work (with like factions and leaders and jobs and maybe how it all plays in the real world) more mc focused really diving in and fleshing out any of the backstories and their impact, like would they use the resources they get for revenge? Would that be a big plot point. Or character focus, where we spend more time learning why each character chose this life, chose to stay. And thats where the found family stuff comes in
Maybe a mix of multiple?
Anyway just my general rambling thoughts for now!
I don't recall making a comment for this IF yet so it's time it gets another positive review because the author deserves it!
I love the lore involving the fae and the supernatural - I love the MC relationship to (BAMF DILF) Carter LOL but seriously I think it's super sweet and I love the dynamic of an adoptee parent taking on a child with "baggage" (supernatural powers, unknown past, etc)
The RO's are distinct and I'd love to romance each one - the kestrel is incredibly compelling (which if that isn't fitting for a fae character idk what is) but my heart has chosen Renard and I'll stick to my lovely witch
SMALL SPOILERS FOR CHAPTER 7
I'm curious how many readers chose the deal with the kestrel or not - and how big of a consequence or reward they'll get from that action (I chose to accept and revealing that to everyone was actually so nerve wracking as if I was the MC lol - but again Carter was a sweet dad)
I'm noticing throughout your other comments for IF/visual novels this genre just might not be your thing
Or you just purposely like going against the stated objective of the story and then throwing your hands up like "but my CHOICES!? shouldn't I get a CHOICE just code it in there developer it's not like it'd be taking time/effort for something else"
So I recommend to stop seeing interactive fiction like games and start seeing it as interactive fiction that wants to tell a story and within that story you can direct the outcome for your character (and no actively wanting to choose to go against the story doesn't make you interesting or is a valid choice - it makes you a typical annoying DND player that gets upset when the party moves on because you don't want to join the carriage ride to save the world)
I'm always excited and in love with what blood-teeth writes and if it is possible to make a selfish request please even if you wish not to continue this story in the future if there's any chance you could leave it up and not have it deleted id be so happy
For the prologue itself the writing is so deeply poignant and conveys so much feeling with as little time it truly has (I especially love the sequence detailing memories and wants the astronaut longs for) it's all so good I'll probably read it over again❤️
Very promising and I love it! im so excited to pursue Kelsey the loser geek x popular jock (and one that's in a "relationship") is just to good to pass by for mc (im especially curious how it'll go when roles are swapped)
Also a bit funny but while playing I decided to do chores so I had a nice cackle when I read this
Your Episode 1 runtime was 01:16:55 (1 hours, 16 minutes, and 55 seconds).
I'm completely blown away by the depth and the writing! I couldn't say no to bringing Checl with me (my MC is gonna need someone optimistic and kind for a whole lot of pain he's probably gonna put himself and others through LOL) also related but I love my sweet puppy (I named him Good Boy because that's what he is while being a terrifying beast 🥺)
And I'm very curious how the future encounter with Tsering will go (as of this point my MC just wants to shoot him in the leg and push him off a bridge - you don't get the amount of past vulnerability shown to you without a price LOL) I know we got some lovers of him currently tho so maybe that'll change~
Yes! If you search IF games anything interactive fiction will show up
Also I would sorta be repeating myself but since Lunan said they've recently thought about selling the full game and writing with that goal in mind I'll leave that discussion and thought process for them (lord knows I'm never gonna make an IF myself lol)
I will say the last few parts of your criticisms seem highly unnecessary - because the IF is currently free (and free games or books etc. will be quite unprofessional) also most IF authors I've seen who charge anything have a patreon (that the author doesn't have) which you opt into for bonus content
The most I've seen an IF go for is 12$ (I think authors deserve more but that's besides the point) and that's on the high end
Which is all to say whatever prices the author 'would' charge you'd get about what you'd pay for but the author isn't charging anything so it's not worth speculating on
Honestly with all the criticisms in the comments I was expecting more of a bite to this IF lol
Overall I like it I actually think the companions can be quite nice in their own ways despite reading comments saying their only mean - like Nash off the bat is a sweetheart - in the beginning Leanna is just trying to work things out in the moment to survive so she comes off as "harsh" but literally right after Rohan is being a prick (which they fully send him off as to break off the tension) she comes to the MC and directly shows cares for how they feel
The alien (sorry can't remember their name) is stand offish but it's shown they clearly have a good heart 1) because their being hunted/exiled from their kind and 2) they show a clear care for joia's whole being and they even explain their reasoning for not trusting us at the start which the MC shares mutually back because their an alien lol
I like Rohan as a character I think he's the foil to the MC and it could be the Luka alien stage lover in me but I like that bit of toxicity - I recall seeing a comment asking why anyone would ever romance him and its the same reason people play IF where you can be a murderer/villain - and as a sidenote I felt like the whole "surgery" and forced tranquilizer was way more traumatizing then the intercourse (but maybe its diff if you dont choose to sleep with rohan I'll have to see)
so good your writing has my stomach in knots sometimes I cant get enough man and I love having my stubborn lil man tell flea to stay like his puppy dog earnest is something the incubus cant say no to LOL
as a sidenote im really happy I was able to guess the culprit for the new case idk made me feel a lil smart
Oh haha I was not expecting to see the IF here but it's a very happy surprise!! I still really like this story (idk if you'd recall me author but I was the anon on Tumblr who problem solved the riddle section using Google doc LOL -)
Also I recall you liking sunflowers? So here's one for you 🌻 ty again for publishing your story here
