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Great concept and I'm liking the cast of characters so far, we've got a nice mix of personalities. I'm glad there was actually a difference between how Anjali reacts to you if you choose a more antagonistic route, can't wait to see if there are different routes for other characters later on!

Some feedback so far 

• For the flirting I wish there was a medium between them. Sometimes it felt like my only options were to have a cheesy pickup line/obvious innuendo, or be a blushing mess.
• I initially wanted to play a shy, inexperienced MC. Something more like Kalea. Instead my MC is automatically extroverted and their default dialogue is confident and charming. I wish we had more say in that. 
• An option to set MC's sexuality would be great. I know why a lot of authors avoid doing it, but since it's a dating game show I think it's necessary. Opposite sex pairings (for a gay bc for example) would be seen as platonic. I wouldn't have to worry about whether their character gets disappointed or what options I get to reject them. 

Looking forward to chapter 2! I'm ready to force myself into the cold zone so I can see how it plays out ⛄

Congratulations!!

SO EXCITED 🥳🥳🎈!!!! Can't wait! Wishlisted on steam ofc. I LOVE the art and the plot sounds so intriguing. Do we really need hatred to return? Stay tuned to find out!

> Complex lore made accessible: enable translations for Etruscan names and access a rich codex with entries about culture, religion and more;

Yay! Love when games have codexes, I'm that person who'll sit and read everything I can right at the beginning.

> Lucius, the crimson-clad soldier

I read this as crimson-CHAD at first😂

As another lesbian I didn't get that from SOTA. I was very happy with the amount of screentime the female LIs had. Honestly I forgot the male LIs existed at times bc I barely saw anyone other than Marane and Sylas. I wondered if the guys were involved in the plot at all 😅

Maybe it's bc I didn't try the male routes at all (even platonically)? I'm assuming they appear more in the plot if you do.

𐌚𐌖𐌋𐌂𐌖𐌓 sounds so interesting! How do we pronounce it? 

I'm always a sucker for pets/animal friends in games so I hope the swan stays 🥹 Can't wait to hear more about it, especially that badass lightning scar 👀

SPOILERS BELOW.

I realized the thing that's been bothering me about Tellus is that we never got to know him. There's this past history he has with MC but we never got to see that happen, bc he was more like a background character with the focus being on MC's friendship with Eve. When we reunite it's very emotional for everyone but on my end it took me a sec to remember who he was. Him lashing out at MC made me dislike him initially, whereas in another scene when Calliope lashes out at MC (about Vicente) I was more understanding. I felt like I knew her more and where she was coming from, while Tellus felt more like a stranger and on the real I was more annoyed he broke our shit than anything else lol. That being said, his apology made me sappy- they always do- and I'm looking forward to seeing him and MC rekindling their friendship.

I'd like to see more of him sprinkled in, either in the first chapter or whenever we're reminiscing. Like if we weren't with Eve we were with him, or how all three of us hung out together (his shy dynamic with a bold Eve would be fun to see. Eve wants to do X, MC wants to do Y, and ofc Tellus always agrees with whatever MC says which sets her off 😂), or more about the way he participated in MC's hobby.

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I loved the differences with Bayram and his nicknames. I went back and picked everybody so I could see what he chose for them. Calliope's was my favorite, calling her LIL BUDDY. 

My overall fave part was when we had to keep our pet from running out of the room. Reminded me of mine and all the times I had to squeeze through the door while they desperately tried to shove me out of the way. Compared to everything else it was such a little thing, but for some reason it stuck out to me and made me happy 🥰

I tried in both Chrome & Brave on my phone and both force me into landscape. I think it's my phone bc other Twine games have never given me the option to switch between both 🤔 I gotta figure out how to fix it

I like the design but I don't think it translates well to mobile. Just a pet peeve but it's locked to landscape mode. I prefer reading stories in portrait mode bc it's easier to hold the phone and use it one-handed while laying down.

Other than that, the image itself is causing me some issues. 

• Usually I like to read in bed with my phone dimmed & lights off, the image at the top is very bright in contrast.

• And the major issue (could be bc of my phone? a google pixel 4a) is the music notes being massive for some reason lol. When I want to save or change settings I have to scroll down quite a bit. Pictures below

The demo is very short but managed to be very intriguing. Playing an out of practice hero sounds like so much fun! Not to mention the beautiful art. 
Can't wait for this release :)

Thank you!

Is there a way to change the size of the text? Currently it's massive and takes up most of my screen.

Thanks for answering! Even if you don't play as a lesbian though, the sexual content isn't optional? You have to have sex with certain characters?

Does this mean if we play as a lesbian we have to have sexual interaction with men or it's still optional/for ulterior motives?

The demo is literally just pedophilia. At the very beginning this poor girl is crying about how she's gonna get married off to some random man and never see her family again, and the protag is thinking about how badly she wants to fuck her.

The protag is an adult woman who's attracted to a teen girl and leaves the situation she feels she's unable to keep herself from assaulting her. Her thoughts are a constant of "she's so sexy if I'm here any longer I won't be able to stop myself from doing something to her". Many references to how the girl is so young, so petite, so innocent, so uncorrupted, so naive- and the protag is deviant and horny and the girl will feel uncomfortable and betrayed if she knew what she wanted to do to her 🤢 

Insanely creepy.

I misread the description and thought it was about her getting away from a now-adult pupil who had grown attracted to her... but no, it very blatantly explains this is a story about a pedophile.

i think you should post rewritten ch1 when you're done. It's bc I'm selfish and wanna see it sooner 😂 I'm the type of person who doesn't care if it takes years between chapter updates, any content is great! 

Take your time and welcome back. We're all glad to hear from you again and I hope you're doing well. 

Awwww my bestie, I hope he's happy I kept the bracelet he made me 🥹

As someone who never got the chance to play LS, I love y'all for making these so much <3

I very publicly quit my job- police were involved it was a whole thing let's not get into it- and told everyone I'd be spending the rest of the week bonding with my manatee, Pickles. They told me I was crazy, I said I was Cantata. You've made a FOOL of me! 

Next thing I'll find out manatees aren't even a pet option AND there won't be any free robux 😔

FINALLY, I can meet my animal companion- a manatee I'm naming Pickles 🥹 

Love this! Royal arranged marriage and childhood mistreatment is an interesting combo. Exactly the type of IF I've been looking for, not necessarily y'know, the torture... but a royal MC that doesn't get to truly live as royalty. There are some similar plots where MC is unwanted by their family but I can't think of any where they're literally locked away. 

The idea that MC's father is so traumatized over his wife's death he does a complete switch (I'm assuming he wasn't always a piece of shit 😂) and locks away the very last piece of her- the piece she died to create and provide for him- is so compelling!

Revenge would be a nice option but this also makes me wonder if we'll be able to forgive him in some way? Not entirely, but for an MC to understand why he got that way. Not because I actually feel for him but I like playing MCs that are insanely naive/kind to a fault. Ones that think everything should be sunshine and rainbows, and that a big hug and some love will solve everything 🥺

Can't cuddle with Morgan if you got rid of Chris 

I'm on a laptop which is prob why it's more apparent to me. idk exact screen size but when screenshotting it says it's 1980x1080. There's just a lot of unused screen space with the text squished in the middle. If I make the text bigger it fills the box instead of utilizing the large amount of empty space. This is a screenshot with the text at max size in the settings.

That said I did finish reading and it's just as good as I remembered. This was one of those WIPs I lost track of back when and could never remember enough about it to find it again lol, glad to see it finished. I was so invested, forgot it was just a demo until it was already over! I saw another comment where you said this is the first 11 chapters which is very generous since usually we only get the first few so thank you! The text size is less of an issue for me on mobile which is where I'll likely be buying the full game when I can.

I remember reading some of this waaaay back when it was on dashingdon. I think it only had up to ch1 or 2? I'd love to see the rest of the demo but having to read in a tiny box that only fills like 30% of the screen is frustrating. Making the text bigger or zooming in just makes the text larger in the box without making the box bigger. Would you consider allowing us to pick a different layout?

Her art is AMAZING! It really stood out to me when I first saw Viatica's page, I'm so glad you were able to commission her again. Absolutely beautiful 🤌 I love the pose for Bayram, man's is serving. It's kinda like he's teasing by flashing just a lil bit of the tattoo 🤭

Finished ch1, absolutely amazing but also shame on you for not developing time travel powers to finish it NOW 😡

The world you've developed here is fascinating, there are so many stories I've read with magic but never where the magic was attuned to voices. Really looking forward to learning more about our MC's culture as we watch them grow! And- most importantly- meeting our fur baby 🥹

I do have a question though. I understand hiding our voice by pretending to be mute, but why are we also pretending to be deaf? Is it bc we have better sense of hearing and we'd give it away accidentally?

"Save a wild animal from a hunter’s trap and gain a steadfast companion. Because fur baby."

Literally all I needed to know. SOLD!

WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO 💃💃💃💃🥳🎈🎉🪅

As someone who also hates "demo TBA", I'm glad you're still active and responding to people bc it lets me know I just have to be patient. I'm sorry the last commentor was so rude, I know shit happens and IFs are a large undertaking. There are plenty of IFs I still hold out hope for and check in on bc I know the authors love their stories as much as we do and are planning on finishing them whenever they can.  I'm ok with you keeping this page up so people like me can add it to collections.

I hope all goes well for you Vi, I'm glad focusing on your mental health (god knows I need to as well 😅)  and I'm looking forward to the day you can finally get this story out of your head ❤️

This was AMAZIIIIIIING! I was so invested I got disappointed when it was over! I appreciated that we could choose if we were interested in men or women at the beginning, as a lesbian it's so frustrating trying to find engaging VNs that don't force male characters on you 😓 Can't wait for the full release! 

Question though, in the game will there be ways to increase our stat/abilities that we set at the beginning, or are they always static?

P.S. Can we get more hints as to who the fifth romance will be 👀? Is it a character we've met already in the demo? 

Oops, what I meant to say was it was terrible and you should totally go back and make it much longer and more detailed 😉 (/s ofc... Unleeeeesss 👀) 

I finally got around to reading chapter 8, and the Elora scene 🥵? Thank you ma'am! I love her route so much, as tempting as Anu is idk if I'll ever be able to do her route with Elora distracting me. 100% gonna buy this when it's finished!

oh and when we met her cousin, and i said we were just friends and she was like "UMMMM NO" 🥺😭

While I like the overall design, please consider a way to play without it being on a TV screen. It's difficult for me to read on a tiny box in the middle of my already small laptop screen 😞

Can't wait for more! I snooped your tumblr and saw you wrote some Kamilah fics and now I'm an INSTANT FAN (I love Kamilah sm 🥺😭).

EDIT:fixed by switching to desktop mode and changing text size in settings

Was playing on Mobile last night and made the text size bigger. When I woke up and tried to continue, this happened. The text size on the opening is huge and since it's locked in landscape mode it hides the buttons. I can't play bc I can't scroll down.

Finished the demo on Sysba's route- AMAZING! The plot summary alone made me want to play, but once I saw we could romance an eldritch god I was SOLD. Brilliant worldbuilding, loved your sense of humor, appreciated the Mean Girls reference 😉 My only complaint right now is the (occasional) long transitions.

Will other characters get art like Gasper? It was cool and I liked the way you implemented it where the snake is, but I was a little confused since he's just a side character (so far?).

Love this game! Enough to actually report bugs I found through your form-- usually I don't bother but this game is so great I had to actually help out for once 😆!

Gotta shout out Elora! I'm playing a shy MC with her and the way she enjoys flustering her is so cute! Can't wait to spend more time with her. 

Chapter 5 was fantastic, I appreciate you let us really choose how we felt about things. I had a feeling this would happen, I'm actually happy about it and looking forward to seeing how things pan out.