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New Genesis in the Sirius Sector... Nah, it will never catch on. Joking aside, i get your point. I adopted the perspective emulating some old sci-fi tones for long background dump in short text, i didn't get they were themselves similar to stories in the old testament, go figures. Not the best to engage into a story, indeed, needed better prose.

Although it had some tad unsuspected turns, I am quite amused with this one, quite a laugh.

Thanks. I have the the same opinion about grammar/clarity, but i had some issues and could not get to do some more corrections rounds :( 

Thanks. I kinda wrote this way the three stories i submitted to the Jams. It is consistent, at least, although not intented.

Thank you for all your comments. After the Jam, I will update the text polishing the weak spots and correcting errors.

I am not to fond of commenting, but I'll try to reply to you as, to clarify, i am not sure of the intent you see in the story was the one i had in mind. The theme would be the in universe view of a classical war scenario in a wargame in the Grimdark Future, the story and the metastory interlaced, so to speak, as others have commented. About the race of the alien scout (as i thought of it), my first intention was to be a Space Elf, has you have guessed, but the repetitive and aloof speech only meant to reflect an intimidating interrogation from a non human, nothing more. As you have quite rightly pointed, because its race is not named and its description is quite ambiguous, more suggesting than explaining, I realized it could fit in a number of the other factions of the game, absolutely unintended, but I kind of liked it.