Just read through your game and very nicely done! I'm in the process of making a blog. One of the big reasons was I want to take board games (components and light narratives) and make them into RPGs. So I'm glad there are other folks out there who are thinking similarly. And awesome job for finishing it in 48 hours!
Here are some thoughts and reactions I had:
- Everything about your theme is great! Love the crime family angle and allows players to really create a fully fleshed out character. The Family Phase is well done and nice random tables. Your classes / stats are nice and thematically work.
- Your alternating narrator is a pretty neat idea! It's a nice way to divide up the GM responsibility. You could even open this up for more players (the person on your right is your narrator).
- The intro didn't let me know that they were criminals immediately. At first I thought the boss was just... well a normal boss
- Great that you acknowledge all the versions of Monopoly! I think you should encourage people to bring in whatever version they are playing into the narrative (could make it a bit more jokey).
- I was surprised that you didn't use the Property Cards! I was waiting for it. I also wanted to see more use of the board. They could go either clockwise or counter (do they spend more time prepping or do they rescue the family member first). But great use of the other components! I especially liked the money = Assets. And the green houses for blockers.
- There were a few times where the ordering of things had me confused. All the ideas are there (once I double checked)! For example, we learn about Blockers on pg 3 and figure out how to leave them on pg 6.
- All in all, great job! And way to chase down an idea!