Wow! There were so many little details that really pulled this together. It's so easy to drift into the realm of just blocks of text but this felt visceral at every moment. I really liked the dissonance of their internal dialogue and what was happening around them. That sense of being alone against the world and questioning everything you say and do and how others think of and perceive you is really real and heavy. The art all fit together in the world really cohesively. I can tell everything you draw is really intentional and it looks exactly how you want it to look - and i love that kind of vibe in art. It all FITS really well, you know? It tells a beautiful story and effects emotion and that's what matters. I love it when it's weird and gritty and different. And recognizable! That's SO important to be recognizable!!
Things like when text would shake and quiver and one word would stay still was really cool and effective, emotions wise. All of the really active parts of the story it barely even felt like I was reading, I was so pulled into the scene. I didn't run into any bugs, everything worked, no issues saving or loading in and all that jazz. There were a few grammar and spelling mistakes but nothing crazy and for a jam game especially that's almost unavoidable. Sorry I didn't take pics, in hindsight maybe I should have but they're not major, I'm sure you'll get to them eventually.
Can't wait for the rest!!!!! Even just the name of the story, Veins like tapeworms paints such a vivid vibe and image. Really cool, I'll be thinking about it for a while.