I liked the story so far and how the MC character looks like. I think your VN would be improved if there were more decisions from the user, I think it would be good if there were more decisions to be taken by the user, even if they outcome are minimal, VN are expected to be interactive works. Also it would be a nice touch to the experience if you include some sounds or background music.
I can't wait for future updates, keep up the good work. Is your novel, Grizzly Science, already published somewhere?