I have read everything you wrote. This chapter was a rough draft so to say. I have been rewriting it and currently just updated the newest version (and hopefully the final before moving on to chapter 2).
In the revision, I wanted to focus on giving the player more of a say, so hopefully the new version is more up to your taste. I did not add ethnicity nor anything that I might not use in the story or be that relevant but if I do see it to work or need it, I 'll definitely add it.
Moving forward, I do want to give the player more choices over their reactions. I'm a newbie to coding and writing IFs so that might be easy to see. I am trying, though, so I hope I can only improve. Saves should be working now, too!
Glad you enjoyed it, and happy you're here!