Notes while playing the game:
- I would try to split out the words so there is no scroll bar or make the height of the game a bit bigger. So I don't need to scroll to read the text
- I like the setting of the story and the way it is written. I can sense the coldness and the quietness of the world.
- I also like that it's short. I do a bit of reading every now and then. But reading longer stuff feels like a commitment. I could see more short stories done like this as some sort of anthology. Could also get people more into reading haha.
- Might be nice have some ambient music or sound effect after you choose a choice. (something you can toggle on / off)
- Second choice made in the game is oddly worded. I think I would just remove the sentence before it. (I see it work pretty well in the lines after this)
- Also the building where the player isn't sure. Maybe you can preface by saying it's some institutional building, that may have been a school, hospital, or prison. Then you can link text saying "Enter the institutional" building
Overall the game is enjoyable to me and would like to read more like this. Keep up the good work!