i see you already have proofreaders, but playing the demo i still found some grammatical errors. i do editing for poetax on ao3, and she says i'm pretty good ;) i don't have a real job or anything, so if you would like another set of eyes, i'm almost always available. just lemme know if you're interested- and don't let my horrible punctuation confuse ya; my casual typing is way different from my professional editing. just hit me up here or on tumblr if ya wanna give my help a shot.
there's also some little quirks in a cg or two that i could fix, probably without the original artist even spotting the difference! (just noticed when guntur first shows up, his eyes are little off-center on his face)
i wouldn't ask to be credited for these small things. i just think this is gonna be a cool game and if i could help it shine even a speck brighter, i'd be happy.