Been a week, and it's different topic anyway...
Typo report! Replaying from the start, when Sam totally unexpectedly throws you into a temple where you meet Ashley, queen of pranks, and Sarah, queen of being underconfident, Asking about Nether magic, Ashley responds with "Wouldn't be much good in a war we didn't" You are missing an if, it should be "if we didn't". Yeah, it's quite early in the game, but still, reading it as it stands now is kinda jarring! A little later, when asking if I have a license for that snark, license is misspelled, but that might be intentional.
Something else, you use cursing in areas that it would be acceptable (like exasperated or stressed out) and I think it adds to the charm of the game. You aren't doing it a lot - that would turn me off, I hate excessive cursing - but when you are using it, I feel like it adds to the game. It's like it's being told from an 18 year old's perpresctive in every sense. :)