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Heyo.
Game's good so far.
Story is interesting.
Characters are likeable.

But your proofreading needs a bit of work.
I mean misspelling "doctor" is embarrassing really :P
"alot" is not a word. Literally doesn't exist.
And I'm assuming you just flipped a coin for using either "a" or "an"
Also don't directly translate a German idiom. "sicheren Tod" is "certain death" not "safe death" xD Even Google translate knows that :P
Lastly, and this one you should know since you Germans (I'm assuming you're German) are so fond of capitalizing every noun; names are capitalized in English. That includes the names of countries.

I'm honestly not trying to be an ass. Just trying to help you improve

And I really did enjoy the game.


PS. English is my 3rd language, German my 2nd ;)

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could have came off a little better

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It could also have been a hell of a lot worse.
You new to the internet? ;)

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just saying you fit right in that troupe of saying "not trying to be a [insert and term]" then proceeding to be a [insert term again]. Could have just called out the typos and left it there is all.

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First of all, thank you for the grammar improvements.  And secondly, I have to agree with Waffle, this could have been expressed more diplomatically. And that something could be worse is not an argument, haha it could always be worse. Not only on the internet. Our goal should be to be as nice as possible and not the other way around. But dont worry it doesnt bother me personaly i will thank you again, for taking your time and pointing out my grammar mistakes, since i am not very good grammarwise, even in my mother tongue, so it is helpful.

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Hey I made you a compliment sandwich. I was plenty of nice ;)

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I did too.
Didnt you notice? :P

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Haha honestly I didn't. Nice :D