A somber, mournful ending. It was interesting to have the story placed in a wider scope, instead of a more personal one. I also like the names. Is there a Deep Space Nine reference in there, or am I just imagining things?
The story felt eerily similar in concept to your previous one, "the Talking Stick." Same vein at least. I hope to see something fresh next time.
All in all, I liked your story. I'm excited to see what's next from you.