I really loved this – the art and writing are just beautiful, and the way you’ve combined all the elements is incredibly atmospheric. I’m not sure I can easily describe the otherworldly feeling it gave me, but combination the setting and the style and your turns of phrase created something really immersive.
The way you set up the movement and train sound was such a good combination - I felt so immediately ‘in place’ that I was a bit startled when the character appeared! Her reveal was also really well done – that’s exactly how you see people on a train, and although this didn’t occur to me at the time, having her not all visible at once was a clever way to work with the jam constraints!
Anyway, I’m looking forward to trying out all the variants, but I didn’t want to do them consecutively because I liked the ‘realness’ of the spell it wove. (Normally I’m happy to vary things straight away, but for this it felt right as a single journey.)