Nice little story. Nothing very complex or difficult to figure out, but engaging enough to keep my attention. The ending made me lol. And as much as I like visual novels, it's cool to see some gay games with a different visual and gameplay style.
Some criticisms:
- Lots of spelling and grammar errors. I'd be happy to proofread the script for you if you send it to me in plain text.
- The spell interface seems to kick you out if it thinks you're trying to WASD, which is probably a good thing in general, but it got a little too enthusiastic and was kicking me out half the time when I tried to cast WATER.
- No save or pause. Pressing ESC and saying I didn't want to quit booted me back to the start of the game, which would have been more of a pain if I'd been further along. Changing the ESC function to pause or bring up an options menu would be useful.
- Lots of issues with clipping and awkward movement.