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A topic by snow created Jun 25, 2023 Views: 361 Replies: 21
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Developer(+1)

Hey, if you're one of those people who loves to tell me how bad at spelling I am (which is very bad) you can post here. I am not asking for free work from y'all, but I know some of you are hardwired to do it so feel free to dump it here. 

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Hannah Smothers on page 36 has a pack too big for her *fram*.

Also on page 36 "attackh a skill, stat, or unique ability to them."

The Black Mask "Lkes loud music"

Sam Gam is to perfect. 

Thanks for the cool thing!

Developer

Corrected! Thanks for digging into the freelancers. I like Gam too haha

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Pg 37's sidebar has "page XX" instead of the page number it's referencing.

Developer

ty! corrected.

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Just started reading it, it seems very sick. Here's some edit things I've found.

Page 10. "Masive Damage:" instead of massive.
Pages 30+. Footer says Snow Hack where it should say Songbirds
And, finally a weird one. There seems to be remnants of two different combat systems in a couple instances. Volf Knight (p.19) and Berserker (p.15) both reference adding things to attack rolls. On the equipment page (p.32) it shows the modifiers for an attack roll. However, in the actual combat rules (p.96), it implies to only roll a d20 to see if you crit (though it says "just roll damage" suggesting you don't roll a d20 at all). Monsters follow this convention and don't have an attack bonus.

Developer

I KNEW I was forgetting something. I was in such a mad dash today. 

I've fixed the mixups with AC/attack rolls/dodge rolls. It'll still take some fiddling still moving forward, but I really appreciate/like how mork borg/cy_borg does it with flat to-hit DCs. This has gone through lots of iterations (as you can see) so thanks for noticing and picking at it.

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Pg 10, Recovery paragraph: "good comapny"

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Pg 22, "Gang Rolls" should be Roles (header and body text)

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Typo on Page 11 - 

Glimpse the Cave

You saw the afterlife. An endless cave swallowed by a living

darkness. You are alone. Forever. This is what comes after. This is

where spirits come frome... And then you wake up.

'where spirits come from...'

Thanks for this amazing game!!!!

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Maybe silly, but i think best of 7 should be 4, not 5. Page 13, skill challenges.

Developer

lmao you're so right

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Summons, p. 36: “Only at their temples can be contacted.” – seems to miss a pro/noun (“Only at their temples can they be contacted” or something)

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Page 74: Dungeon Entrance says “See page (xx)” instead of listing the actual page number

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current version.

p. 34, Armor: “When armor runs out it is destroyed and needs <to be> repaired or replaced”.

p. 40, the Soda list.

  • 3 says “GOBLIN SPEACH” while it’s spelled “Goblin speech” in the explanation on p. 41
  • 91 “POLLENATE” vs. “Pollinate”

p. 71, travel encounter list says “AVALANCE” instead of AVALANCHE

Developer

haha i didn't know dropping the "to be" was "incorrect." That's just how I talk. Googled it and found out I probably got it from my southern family members. the more you know.

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ohhh i wasn’t aware that was a thing in southern dialect! things they don’t teach in school…

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in Red, the first line of “Skills” is repeated – “The skills necessary to be a songbird. All of them exist inside eachThe skills necessary to be a songbird. All of them exist inside each songbird,”

and in both versions the 40th soda says “Was Once Was” but i’m guessing it’s supposed to be What Once Was?

not necessarily spelling but troubleshooting i guess!

Developer(+1)

corrected

Page 11, under the Glimpse the Cave section: it says "poitn" instead of point :]

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The first line of "Skills" being repeated is present in Blue as well.  
> The skills necessary to be a songbird. All of them exist inside eachThe skills necessary to be a songbird."

Hey! I dunno if this is the right place, but I got this recently through a bundle and noticed a small mistake.

In the Magic section, under Scrolls & Books, the text says to roll a d20, but the table the roll is meant to reference is for a 2d10 roll.