Finally had time to get back to the game. Reading over it a second time to hunt down some more typos. Here's what I got so far. Will likely continue with it tomorrow (if I have the time). Also do you have discord? Itch is kinda inconvenient for typo reports since I can only send image files. Can neither paste ss here directly nor can I send them in a doc if I gather a bunch at once.
Thanks again for showing me this. I've already fixed the previous spelling mistakes in the most recent version of the game I'm working on (Not the upcoming update but the one that comes next) and I'll be sure to correct these mistakes as well. Honestly it's baffling the mistakes that get past me. I once spelled "awkward" with "U" and "E" thrown in there somehow. Also be warned this reply is long.
About your other inquiries, I'll answer them in order.
First, I do have discord. I am also thinking about making a server if the community ever gets big enough. For now if you would like you can send me messages personally. My username is Flamin'L#9253. Feel free to send me anything else you find or to just ask general questions about the game if you have any.
Collecting the bounty for the minotaur comes in the update I will be releasing in mid July that adds an explorable village to the game. The June update focuses more on the manor itself. The only reason the MC thinks about it is to reaffirm that he only fought the minotaur for the money.
"Latter of food." is supposed to be "platter of food." My keyboard is a piece of crap. I meant "on the wall is an adjustable metal arm."
To answer your question about Alonzo. What I'm trying to portray is that he invented and named the shower and the lights. The idea around Alonzo is the player spends enough time around him to start to understand he's a genius who invents things either for fun or to just stave off boredom. One of the drawbacks of his limited run in the demo is it doesn't allow quite enough time for this to be easily picked up, but Alonzo will become more fleshed out as the game goes on. But just so no one is confused in the future, I'll add a scene where the MC talks to Alonzo about the shower.
Finally, the last one was intentional. A lot of what the characters are feeling internally will come in the form of how they say things. The MC for example has not fully come to terms with the death of his people and is instead doing everything in his power to disconnect himself from them. Referring to them in the past tense helps him do this. Reaffirming the idea that they are gone, but he is not. Other characters will use present tense when talking about the impact the human empire has left in its wake.
To finish up I'd like to point out a lot of the errors in sentence structure are because I'll write something one way, decide to change it, and not rewrite it all without realising or I'll start a sentence, get distracted by something, then come back with a different idea in mind for how to write the sentence that ends up messing with the structure.
I'm really glad you're taking the time to play my demo and I'm thankful you're helping me fix the mistakes I've made.
I hope you enjoy the next update of the game, it's the product of about six months of work and I'm quite proud of it. Let know if there's anything I missed... and sorry for the essay.
Will send you a dm with the next batch of typos, etc.
About the minotaur bounty: Was it really only money? Think it was mentioned that he also wants to make up for the evil deeds of his kin and he also thinks to himself that he would normally go look for a village with a monster problem to stave off boredom if he wasn't injured. Or is he just telling himself that he did it only for the money because he refuses to acknowlege the other reasons?
Thanks for clarifying about Alonzo. It wasn't quite clear if he really invented those things or if he knew them from elsewhere and merely introduced them to wherever the mc is at rn. When talking about the dragon scales and teeth for example he says something along the lines of "if I can figure that out, we will have electrical light". That makes it sound as if electrical light is a known concept and he merely looks for a way to make it work in the manor with the materials on hand. That impression is further backed up by the fact that the MC just accepts that term without asking what exactly it refers to (even though its kinda obvious since they talked about the whole dragon scale thingy before Alonzo brought up that term (electrical light).
Ah ok, that explains the MC's choice of words when referring to the human empire.
Don't worry about the spelling mistakes and structural errors. When writing longer texts that's perfectly normal. Since I'm playing the game anyway it's no real trouble to point out the mistakes I notice while playing. Plus it helps me keep my own English skills sharp (not a native speaker). So typo hunting basically helps both you and me.
Looking forward to the next version. And don't worry about the wall of text. For one this reply of mine isn't exactly short either and for another I wouldn't be playing text-based games if a wall of text could scare me off.
