When we started the game, we enjoyed that Ichigo's name seemed to match with the color of the fruit. So we restarted our playthrough and named our main character "Ume" after plum. We also laughed after Googling "Yuzuki" and finding out he was also named after a fruit. I also wonder, does the MC's default name, Aimi, have any significance? What about Haruto's name?
My girlfriend says that she would be willing to make an exhaustive list of the grammar issues if you are interested. She enjoys editing as well as proofreading, and we both enjoyed your VN so much we want to help polish it!