Still playing the game, posting my findings so far:
Wow, that’s a strong setting and intro. The story flows fast, I want to see how it goes on! And character psychology is smartly spread over the talks.
Bugs:
- At the beginning, the Confirm button is cut at the bottom
- After “Ah… I’m crying”, the next text from the detective is instantly skipped
UPDATE:
- the hospital beep loop has a shorter interval at the end, so regularly, the next beep will be played a bit earlier than expected. There is no reason for the character to be stressed at the moment of the story, so I don’t think that’s intended.
Typos:
- “That checks our for a cult” -> ?
- “My fists slam against my legs. One, made our metal shaking”… There were many oddities in this paragraph, it took me a lot of time to understand. Basically, the character lost an arm and a leg on the opposite side like Ed in Full Metal Alchemist? The sentence looks complicated but I think there are also grammar issues there, maybe if you fix them it will become clearer.
- “There’s a hand in my shoulder?” -> “on my shoulder”
- “I thought you were to find who did this to me” -> maybe “you were here to find”
- “I can’t believe I’m beliving her” -> believing