first page of the prologue: "led eyes upon".
don't remember where nut you have the word "enoug" I think might be missing an 'h'.
and y'know just my preferences talking here but.. found the bit of railroading repeating text a little jarring in a way that wasn't my vibe. also a lot of dripping dialogue lol, why not have some sentences drip with this tone but have the next one laced with it's own and the NEXT honeyed in it's tone and etc etc 👀
Loving it so far and always thrilled to follow a rad newly discovered writer! Waiting with bated breath for more!