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  • Did you enjoy it overall? What did you like the most in the demo?

I did enjoy the story a lot. It is a rather unique story that you don't really see too often, which was my favorite part of the demo. I also enjoyed how many choices were offered to me.

  • Who is your favorite character and why?

So far, I think my favorite character would be Amanda. I think I might later like Erika, but it's hard to tell at this point. I like Amanda because she is really kind and helpful.

  • Who is your least favorite character and why?

Least favorite is Matt because he seems a bit to brusque. Hopefully further down the plot he opens up and becomes softer.

  • What do you think of the protagonist ? Can you relate to her?

I did enjoy the protagonist--especially how I was able to choose how she reacted to situations. Too often visual novels tell you how the protag reacts, which makes it harder to relate.

  • What is your opinion of the artwork?

I think the artwork needs improvement. The backdrops look fine, but I think the sprites could be touched up a bit.

  • What do you think of the story so far?

I thoroughly enjoyed the story and was disappointed that the demo ended so soon.

  • Was there something that bothered you about the game?

The only thing I didn't like was how clumsy the protagonist is--but it might be realistic given the situation she was in, but it just seems to be a common trope.

  • Did you find any typos or spelling mistakes?

There were a fair amount of spelling and grammar mistakes. It began to detract from the overall story, but I might be more picky considering I have an English degree. If you do need an extra hand with typos/spelling errors/grammatical mistakes feel free to contact me!

  • What would you say needs the most improvement?

Besides the spelling issues, I think the artwork needs the most improvement.

  • Do you think you'll play the finished game once it's released?

Definitely. The story is intriguing and I would like to finish it.

  • The protagonist doesn't have a sprite. Did it bothered you? Did it help you to relate to her or would you prefer her to have one?

I would actually like to see a sprite for the main protag. It would be even better if we could possibly choose from like two different sprites to help us relate more to her.

  • Any other comments?

I offered my assistance regarding the spelling and grammar mistakes, so if you feel like you need some help, please feel free to contact me! My email is rebeccaschmieman@ymail.com

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- Hi Lady Schmarmalade!

Thank you for giving me your feedback.

I am happy that you enjoyed the story and the demo overall. (It made me smile when you saif you were disappointed the demo ended so soon :p )

For Matt : I have to say that in otome game I like the rude type of guy that opens up later on so I automatically made Matt this way x) I hope you'll come to like him.

I am relieved that you liked the protagonist and the amount of choices that are offered to you. It's one of the thing that I find the most difficult to do, to imagine what other persons would do or not do, like or don't like...

I take note of your comment on the artwork. I have to say I don't really know how I can improve the sprites right now, but I'll search how to do it.

I understand your opinion on the clumsiness of the protag, it's true that this is a common trope, so I'll try to not use it too much.

In the end maybe I'll make a sprite for the protag, at first I though that it would be better to not have one, but as I made progress in the story I began to doubt. So thank you for your opinion!

For the typos and spelling mistakes :

I am sorry that it distracted you from the story :(

And thank you so much for offering me your help! I definitely need an extra hand with this.

So it might take a while for me to finish the script but I will contact you as soon as I have a final version of it. I take note of your email adress.