(Very envious of your cover... it's why I hesitated to check your stuff out for a bit. Plenty of people are going to check out this clean, polished, piece of work. And it's clean & polished in all the right ways.)
The whispers I hear in "It Writhes" 'is done so well. I wasn't sure I heard them at first... It's unsettling to this brain, unintelligible whispers. Then there's the hint of speech in "I Saw Him In a Nightmare" ...I want to know what they're saying! It must mean something! Something pretty similar to what our brave hero must also be asking herself. I do finally hear "Wake up! Wake up!" still as a whisper... Just love that little piece of character.
A great story you put so much thought in. Picturing the whole setting and how that gets portrayed in Video Game language has me very excited. Like what does that actually look like on a screen!?