Omg.. I only planned on playing 30-40 minutes of this but god this was such a great story! And the maps are sooo gorgeous! I got lost a bit while trying to figure out what to do next at times.. but thankfully we had a kind of small village to look around and the rest of the areas were kind of close so it wasn't a pain to explore but I think a way to track the story progression - like a quest tracker or a journal for example would help somewhat so that the player doesn't forget the objective or has a hint/tip of where to go next to find out more
Two things I noticed while playing the game:
- After talking with Gabriella when Levi tells you at his shop to go talk to her.. if you go back to his store after talking with her - his dialog is still the same, tells you to go talk with her
- After the lake meeting with Levi, if you go to his store - he's not there - so when you try to leave there's a repetition of his dialog from before about the coldness and winter
Also not exactly a bug more like some tiling issues but the water tiles in the snowy map where we find Valerie look a bit off.. kind of misplaced over the ground.. you should check it out
I noticed a lot of misspelling words... I think you need someone to read the text over, it's nothing major and you can still follow the story well enough but I loved the narrative so much.. and I'm just a grammar nazi.. sorryyy haha
I did a short list of the misspelled words as I came across them in case it helps you:
a woman on "his" mid-fourties -> her
"[2Not" -> during the talk with Levi about the helenes at the beginning I think
"teached"-> taught - during Agus backstory fight
"you mind" -> your mind (can't recall where sorry)
"2[" -> during the talk with Valerie
I also noticed that sometimes you wrote "helenies" "arcanies" and other times "helenes" "arcanes"? Not sure if it's intentional, I think not.. but you should probably decide on using just one way of the words xD
OVERALL: I loved this game from beginning to end.. the message of hope behind it was really good.. the way the story progressed at times made me kind of sad (Valerie!! T_T )but I was glad that our heroine got a happy enough end.. or at least a true chance at redemption.. :)
And I know I already mentioned this.. but I can't get enough of the maps..!! They are truly gorgeous.. I didn't even mind getting lost at times because it was another chance to walk around.. the forest, the village, the inn was so beautiful!.. everything looked amazing!
I don't know how you plan on continuing the story but let me tell you that I'm looking forward to playing more! I really want to see Rose trying her best at changing the faith of the world (and I hope there's Agus in that because I really liked him!) but I think anything you make next to continue this game even if it's another character story will be worth my time.. I just know I'll be happy to hear about what your next plans are later on after IGMC is over! ^^
Good luck on the contest!!!