If I had critics it'd be :
* how unlikely you could wipe off debts by throwing one computer by the window (backups on important stuff wouldn't be on one server)
* how they could use the same car of Amy's parent without being traced back instantly (or at least linked to Amy's parents).
* In the archive, the bad guy let them destroy the precious steel-memory thing... WHY ?
Also I must say I was a bit disapointed by Rani's ending - while the start was very promising and creative, it kind of ended in bloody-nonsense with a stereotypical joker monster face to face.
It was well written but, meh ! You made a cast with such a depth it's a bit sad to make them end their story this way ; being war hero and then magic trick, get them make a hipy-social fork from nowhere disregarding all what they stood for. Also using a TONE of the providential hero stuff.
(...I've still Norbert's ending to read, amen !)