Nice potential. Guess I subconsciously wanted so much it to be a yuri story that I resisted to the bitter end to enter a man name as “Sunshine” >_<

Played it on debian, flawless. The story felt… Well - the description didn’t lie, it is bite sized. But with all the assets it felt like a waste no to make it longer !

T’was cute at least, just aaaaah. Too short ! pout

Short & bitter story. Liked the art and overall mood a lot - minus the story which felt a tad too short tbh ^^’

Played it on linux no problem (using the windows build, there is a functional .sh script in there !).

Do you often order people around like that ? You are looking like a jerk right now tbh (especially considering it’s a pay what you want game, first thing should be about being thankful or something…)

Anyway - can’t wait to play it !

Yup, just did end it.

First I must say the craft (graphics/transition) were awesome. And the writing got me going. Great work.

Then (spoiler) I must say I’m dejected by how it turns out after the two first murders. I wanted some reconciliation with Grace so much all along, I felt a bit salty to be honest. I also wanted to see how Nils would use his inhuman powers to influence people’s buried emotions and tweak the Heaven society to something else.

So yeah. I guess I was really envisioning light after dark. Even the dimmest light.

Eating’s one heart, shredding a body, eating tongues or gauging eyes felt very over the top to me - but I thought they would be props for the opening of something “tried that, done that, now, what else ?” and instead they just flee after doing some mayhem ? It felt like an obnoxious slap of “nah, humans are crap” instead of my willy-nilly “human are what their environment make them do”, just tweak the context ! And when you got some angel with magic and can go into one’s head to know everything ? That’s playtime for some utopia right there (or some dystopia, but yet, something else than “vengeance” => “the end”).

Mah. Guess I’ll have to use my own brain to think about a more fitting ending to me. My cravings, my problems after all ! ^^’

Side note : I liked how Cerise was cute despite being in the shoes of the (albeit a bit of a caricature) bad guys. I also liked how she showed herself concerned and caring to Grace at first. Then everything get dismissed at being hypocrisy… But I feel like there could have been a lot more depth to her. You can be a true nazi and have sleepless nights because of your dog’s health after all. I felt like their last moment were a bit… Out of a cartoon, were people doing bad things are by essence bad people - which is not the most interesting place to be in.

Anyway, reading your afterword… I guess I get how “fleeing this piece of crap of toxic people” would be your conclusion if you lived it. Without magic - some destiny cheat - most situation isn’t salvageable alright. It’s just not… Very inspiring to me. I’m already too nihilistic about this, I want to dream another take >_<

For some reason payment through paypal fails for me (tried twice with a different card). Frustraaaation. (edit : YES I DID IT. After 3 tries, seem like you need to register a cellphone to unblock my account somehow)

But the demo was very nice. Cool writing, got engrossed by it pretty fast.

Aw. Can’t pay without using paypall ? I wish to avoid the middleman if possible (but I’ll pay in the end anyway, you’re on THE LIST :p)

NVM, just opened a paypall account for the occasion. But it’s nice not to have any more middlman, I already hate banks, it hurts ;..;

Mhm ? Can’t donate money ? I had your game in my list of “should donate something”, it mostly would be peanuts to make me feel good, but if ever you have some donation system, I’m in ;)

Leyley is an adorable psycho. It’s soooo hard to dislike her. Andy is just an innocent pushover - but their dynamic is pretty fun. All the art is awesome :3

These introverted and tired train-wreck heroines are the best somehow ; love & relatable Mia ^^

The weird capitalist AI on speaker reminded me of that futuristic story where fast-food restaurant RH are overtaken by AI (and everything else afterward) ; that and a mix with Portal for the mad side.

Dunno if you HAD to use the “shared dream” trope (it felt like a cheap story-trick without explanation) ; imho you could have just made it happen in real life ! (but I’m just nitpicking of course, all hail for your story it was good !) ^^’

I wonder why I still don’t get immune to theses run of the mill romance elements. I almost felt “hardened” at first against such a cliché setup (the chunbiyo playing inspector). But then the art and chatter made the rest and I found myself getting into it to the point of being a bit teary.

Fine. It was cool.

If the other are a bit like me, I guess the idea of criticizing/suggesting at authors we like feels a bit arrogant from mere players.

I’ve eventually realized that feedbacks are somehow scarce even for “the good stuff”, so I try to work out the “I’m not worthy to talk to them, I’m overjoyed to but what if I’m just wasting their precious time - AAAAH what have I done” complex >_<’

Very cute. - Would have loved to have the story given more flesh (like some small bumps on the way of relationship ?) to make use of the fluffy vibes overall that ends so fast ! -

From a “it’s over already ? And I was just getting comfy into it ! Aruuuh” point of view ! ^^’

I’m usually only into lesbian stories but I like to be proven wrong. Thanks and… Looking forward to the sequel, I’m already a fan ;-)

I loved the constant choices at first (empoweriiing), but I loved it less on replays because it was… Pretty much 95% common route. It just doesn’t replays that well. :(

Anyway, that’s just details. My point is, the graphics are gorgeous (as anime fan). The romance romantic. The MC has this deathpan attitude I love. And got my gay Pinky Pie trying to have a girlfriend. Sweet :3

Heartcreepwarming !

Love you !

I think I’m into theses kind of setup at least, I love playing heroine, gay, and “unusual/not used much” viewpoint ; the disabled are one of them, and I really appreciate you did. The only VN I know featuring a girl in a wheelchair is “Flowers” (Erika - and it’s pretty good, I love her ! - but they didn’t play much on using facts on disabled, like the most related true life experience we get is her being helped at washing herself, and I don’t even think it’s how it’s done - the wheelchair is mostly a prop sadly).

But to me - the writing is paramount ; design, music, and everything is only a way to make the writing stand out more in the end.

But yeah, I’ll totally give it further try if you write stuff with heroines in the futures. I think no one should judge the quality of a writer on one go ; ebi-hime -for one- did write a tone of VN, half of them I hated, a third of them I cried over - almost felt like I was mislead at the end “who wrote this great… THE BAD AUTHOR I RESENT DID AAAAAAH I DON’T UNDERSTAND” :p

It was great. I let that one downloaded in version 1.1 on my desktop for months without daring to click it (I could see it would have been about kate - and kate was my favorite chara by far - so I was afraid to be too emotional tbh :o).

Anyway, I’ll re-download it in its last version for chapter 2 ! Because I WAAAAANT the next chapter.

Art is great, text is great ; I’m into it !

Yep, there are only 4 possible north direction in this world after all :D

I’m not much into this gameplay side of things, but I thought the sprites were all gorgeous, my earth melted a bit at every cute interactions, that’s so unfair T_T

Text speed seem to be buggy ; wether the speed is set at “max” or “min” in the settings doesn’t change a thing ?

(EDIT : I’ll go and put my review, as I finished the VN since then. I feel like the realisation is fine, the sprites and background great… But I couldn’t “get” into the story, it felt off somehow, like if the people talking had no personality of their own ; I think the writing has a problem but I wouldn’t know how to correct it :(

I loath to say how much time I took on the crossroad piece, I didn’t got at all the star thing to set the north, and had to bruteforce trying all north possibilities until cracking it T_T

First time in a lifetime that I find the non-yuri ending more fulfilling than the heterosexual one. °0°

Designs are cute, the universe bleak, everyone is a scumbag. As usual, I’m not surprised ! I’s veryyyy your-brand of thing ! (and it’s not an insult, I’ll hear all the stories you make !)

I must say ! I love it - but I’m also happy there are less cynic stories out there too to balance things up :p

I’m half-sad half-relieved to see how the ending with Ivy is “not bad” but not good either the least. Usually you’d get the tsundere ending when finally all is fine because they share LOOOVE. Here things are still bittersweet ; Ivy is on her ego trip and savior mode to the end, and our heroine is just here to suffer her burden of being less well off.

It was… Surprisingly good. Not a fan of the story mechanic, I felt a lot of combinations didn’t change much, I ended up trying things randomly until I got the rest ^^’ (…35 days. I feel almost sorry for myself. Blind bruteforce is bad)

Still was kinda sweet. Wish there were a bit more of romance moment ! Or have you hidden secrets youuuu wouldn’t riiiight ? :3

Anyway, the drawings were cute, the side-stories didn’t always pan out relevant but had some insight to them.

Quality stuff !

…In place of the heroine I guess I would try more foolish decision tho. Like trying to say very embarrassing things knowing I wouldn’t need to assume them :p (reminds me of that one episode of Star Gate when the “perfect little soldier” loses his mind in the end and start the day by kissing his crush in front of all, and plays golf in the war room because why not !).

Thanks you for the thoughtful answer too - it always mesmerizing to have the luxury to be in contact with the makers of the stuff. <3

As writing goes, I’m pretty sure one has to make such decisions all the time, I get it (the fact it made me tear up in the end just talk for itself). In the end, I was only hinting on my own taste that I’d appreciate to be “along them” in the confusion about betrayal ; and instead was given a chair of a “I know better, silly them to fall for it awwww…”. ^^

Also I had a thought before sleep “I didn’t say anything about the backgrounds, the backgrounds were cool !”, so here you go.

The mechanic that really made it home, was (probably underused because it was hard to do ?) the chat prompt “start writing”, then… Nope, sending something else ! - To me it’s especially cool because it’s one of the few tricks that are exclusive to games (and it may be a first for me to see it used in a VN). Felt huge on the “feels real factor”, even if it was a one-time thing.

There’s also the “flow” in the chat too, but I wouldn’t know how to replicate that. Like how agonizing it can be to “wait” for an answer sometimes. It’s a major point of miscommunication out there, and the “X is writing…” of late made that mind-game probably even worse and addicting :p - it took me decades to chill about it, and I still get that imagination going haywire because X didn’t answer immediately - hence strategies like… The spamming of reassuring smileys sometimes. On the other hand, you were successful at featuring how things can get floody when both interlocutor are taken by the moment - by making it hard to read, pretty good !

Thinking about stuff I’d throw in, I’d say, maybe one ought to have more miscommunication ? Perplexing answers, failed jokes, and need for clarification is paramount in the chatbox ! Dunno if it could have been used efficiently as an addition ^^’

Last edit : now that I think about it, the subtle “desk soundbits” at the very beginning really added something imho, would have been a small plus to use them more as highlight at certain points. And now I feel like an ass for suggesting so much stuff as non-game-maker. Anyway ! Just saying it’s so cool as to make me try to contribute with some rambly thoughts, don’t you dare take it as “could do better”, t’was great and I’m just awkward about compliments !

And I so did ! Albeit - at the cost of my sleep schedule. 3am out here. Curseeee you !

Kinda inevitable tbh; as I’ve lived my best bits of friendship by texting on WoW at the time, I’m very vulnerable to that very setting (couldn’t get back in that zone since, sadly). Of course the fact that I’m a sucker at lesbian romance helped.

Thanks you a lot for the journey! Big thumbs up for the “natural” flow in the chat. The music felt nice (I’m keeping it on while writing this ~). The CGs felt a bit… Loooot more buffed than what I envisioned - from the sprite, but it still felt nice to have moar artwork at hand.

(spoil) If I had one reservation is how the gig was up like… Like… Maybe at 90% at their first encounter. Then the hints piles up onesidedly (bits and phrases are all over the place), and it felt a bit unnatural for them not to pry a little into it. But maybe it’s the writer’s intent, I guess a lot of drama use the obvious quiproco thing.

Aaaaand I would also say that… Well. The first “I love you” made my eyes glisten but. They do say it a lot. They have like. A cartoonish confidence suddenly. May be the hormonal buff. Okay, maybe it works.

Critic fail at criticizing ! Done ! Bruuuh

Yay ! I was so sad to find out it was a demo in the first place, I’m eager to play it full, the whole experience was reaaaally polished and cool, even though I’m not in astrology one bit, I’m bitting ! :)

I’ll be waiting for it of course ! T’was quality, even if I’m really not into astronomy, it’s quite a feat :D (may be gay magic)

(edit for sake ! Tl;dr Full game is out and I loved it ! Dig in, it’s all polished and nice ! <3)

Yeah same here, I felt a bit sad to be surprised in middle of a story with “this great book was only a demo, sowwy !” :(

I especially enjoyed the smartphones parts, they feel so flowly and natural. Did a lot of stuff like that. And I also was the goofy person trying to get the serious smart girl intention :3

You deserve it very much ! This is one of the best novell I know that uses real world culture examples and is very sharp at it. Also that voice acting ? So damn good !

Darn, I wish there waere a girl love route or at least, a non-relationship one. I mostly loved the heroine personality but… Hurh. I hate mens in romances ! Guh ! T_T

This IS GREAT OH MY GOD how could “they” (world) hide it from me ! Art, writing, wits… Gonna do all the routes :3

Also the whole design experience is flawless, it’s such-a-gem !

Boy’s love yuri ? Intriguing !

I guess diping into preconceived cliché is just being “like the other”, it’s easier to talk about ideas everyone “already kind of have” instead of trying to level up the game.

I wish story-tellers were more aware of their “world view” power - if not avoiding to strengthen unjust ideas - even challenging them the time of a story. It happens. Even. Yuri romance can be quite political (I think of the Vengeful hearth VN for instance <3).

Aww man ! I thought I had wiped the prerequisite bosses already :<

Hey ! I Couldn’t make it work either :(

tsukundere -L /home/implijer/Bureau/dystopia-0.2.0/ -A /home/implijer/Bureau/dystopia-0.2.0/ -m dystopia
error: no such command: -L

Oh, pardon my french ^^’

Anyway, it works ! :3

Thanks a bunch. Taught journey to yuri theses days !

Nooo. I tried to launch it this morning and

$ onsen-ningyo 
;;; note: source file /usr/local/bin/onsen-ningyo
;;;       newer than compiled /home/implijer/.cache/guile/ccache/3.0-LE-8-4.4/usr/local/bin/onsen-ningyo.go
;;; note: auto-compilation is enabled, set GUILE_AUTO_COMPILE=0
;;;       or pass the --no-auto-compile argument to disable.
;;; compiling /usr/local/bin/onsen-ningyo
;;; compiled /home/implijer/.cache/guile/ccache/3.0-LE-8-4.4/usr/local/bin/onsen-ningyo.go
;;; note: source file /usr/local/share/guile/site/3.0/onsen/ningyo.scm
;;;       newer than compiled /home/implijer/.cache/guile/ccache/3.0-LE-8-4.4/usr/local/share/guile/site/3.0/onsen/ningyo.scm.go
;;; compiling /usr/local/share/guile/site/3.0/onsen/ningyo.scm
;;; compiled /home/implijer/.cache/guile/ccache/3.0-LE-8-4.4/usr/local/share/guile/site/3.0/onsen/ningyo.scm.go
Backtrace:
In ice-9/boot-9.scm:
  1736:10 11 (with-exception-handler _ _ #:unwind? _ # _)
In unknown file:
          10 (apply-smob/0 #<thunk 7f91c7c6eee0>)
In ice-9/boot-9.scm:
    718:2  9 (call-with-prompt _ _ #<procedure default-prompt-handle…>)
In ice-9/eval.scm:
    619:8  8 (_ #(#(#<directory (guile-user) 7f91c7c67c80>)))
In ice-9/boot-9.scm:
   2806:4  7 (save-module-excursion _)
  4351:12  6 (_)
In tsukundere/game.scm:
    423:2  5 (run-game #:game-name _ #:init! _ #:time _ #:update-freq …)
In ice-9/ports.scm:
   445:17  4 (call-with-input-file _ _ #:binary _ #:encoding _ # _)
In ice-9/boot-9.scm:
   260:13  3 (for-each #<procedure 7f91bd4ee6c0 at tsukundere/prefe…> …)
In unknown file:
           2 (run-hook #<hook 1 7f91bf63d000 ?> #f)
In tsukundere/game.scm:
    54:22  1 (_ #f)
In tsukundere/game/internals.scm:
    41:25  0 (current-window)

tsukundere/game/internals.scm:41:25: In procedure current-window:
In procedure fluid-ref: unbound fluid: #<fluid 7f91c60485b0>

Oh no. T_T

Oh my bad ! It didn’t build, I had texinfo dependency missing and it put a big warning which… Hided the final error about it being fatal ; it’s on me, I was too hasty :-(

Here it is for debian users (and it should work for ubuntu/mint too I guess) !

# The tricky prerequisits
sudo apt install libsdl2-dev guile-3.0-dev texinfo libsdl2-mixer-dev libsdl2-ttf-dev fonts-liberation
export GUILE_LOAD_PATH=/usr/local/share/guile/site/3.0

# sdl2
cd /tmp
wget https://files.dthompson.us/guile-sdl2/guile-sdl2-0.5.0.tar.gz
tar xvf guile-sdl2-0.5.0.tar.gz
cd guile-sdl2-0.5.0
./configure
make
sudo make install

# tsukindere
cd /tmp
wget https://gitlab.com/lilyp/tsukundere/-/archive/0.2.3/tsukundere-0.2.3.tar.gz
tar xvf tsukundere-0.4.x.tar.gz
cd tsukundere-0.4.x
autoreconf -vif
./configure
make
sudo make install

# THE GAME FINALLY which you already downloaded ages ago but wouldn't install !
cd onsen-ningyo-1.0
autoreconf -vif
./configure --with-default-font=/usr/share/fonts/truetype/liberation/LiberationSerif-Regular.ttf --with-bold-font=/usr/share/fonts/truetype/liberation/LiberationSerif-Bold.ttf
make
sudo make install

#LAUNCH IT !!!
onsen-ningyo

Thanks again for your helpfulness ! No time to play it but it launches, and after work I know what I’ll do ! :3

I think you should consider putting an example of “should work on X major distro by following theses steps”. I’m no dev, so the README with “non-specific steps & no dependency list” scared me, you really had to take me by the hand !