Wow, this is a really nice hololive VN!
I really like that you included voice acting in the game.
I feel the voices you chose, especially for Nemu, are very fitting. Sometimes the intonation is a bit off, but in general the AI generated voices do a great job!
The music was really nice too for each of the different scenes and moods.
I got two endings while playing, not sure if there's more, but I liked the story!
Suggestions for improvement:
- In the story, I didn't understand why Nemu needed to prepare a chalice. She just wakes up and talks to me about it as if I should already know.
- Something similar happened when the Grandpa Gildenbark is presented. The way it's narrated feels like the protagonist knows stuff they shouldn't or something that was taught to them while off-camera. It would be interesting to obtain this lore from a character, teaching it to the protagonist.
- The Kirin all share the same face. It would be nice if you could give each a slightly different face (eye shape, face shape). The hair change and recoloring is a step in the right direction, but could be improved.
- The Kirin branches on the character sprite heads look off, since they're drawn in a different style. Try to match the anime cel-shading and the sprites will look a lot better!
- Some characters are introduced to the reader by name, like Perspa, but the dialogue title still says "Kirin" after we already know their name.
Great job on the game!