Thank you very much for your comment! To be honest, I am aware that in terms of the story, there is much room for improvement. Since it was the first vn that I did programming and that stuff, I wanted it not to be too extensive, to try to apply what I learned in another project. (I also didn't think so many people would like it, haha).
As I said in another comment, I would have liked to add another character, as well as make the dialogue longer, but I was afraid that it would be boring. (And that my drawing skills are not very good to represent the things that I would like and have in my mind).
Many times I have thought about the need to try to find someone to help me, whether it is testing that everything works well, the art, etc. But I can't afford something like that.
The English translation is almost one of the last steps I do at the end of a vn, and I try to review it from start to finish, several times before publishing it. Now I will try to do everything in a more orderly and careful way to avoid so many mistakes. Maybe when I'm finishing my next work, I'll ask on my Twitter if someone would be willing to test it before I officially release it, in order to correct possible translation errors.
I don't want to bother anyone in vain either, so I'll try my best!