Oh wow, of course! I'd be honored!
For Maelbjorn's couplet, to keep each line with ten syllables, here are two possible alternatives:
- Once an heir, god-sentenced to perdition / The sword has become his chief ambition.
- The gods sentenced this heir to perdition / So the sword became his chief ambition.
If you want to talk more about this, I'm Kopten#9136 over on Discord. Let me know if there's anything else localization-wise you'd want a second opinion on, I love this sort of thing.