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I agree. Honestly, I think the problem I had writing the story is that it isn't really complete. I was trying to convey the conflict he was feeling inside himself. His last comment about his missing hand was supposed to establish that he was ultimately selfish, even if a small part of him felt remorse about the deaths of the men he took for granted during the Gyris campaign. It could have been done better.

Don't get me wrong, it was still a very powerful and evocative piece. The emotion was real and the commander definitely came across as conflicted. You've still written a good story that simply needs a little tightening up.