Oof, the game's story goes at break neck speed and the MC is one of the biggest Gary Stue's I've seen in a VN to date. There is some sort of mystery/threat going on in the background, but the MC has no troubles or challenge with any of it. Makes the story kinda uninteresting and boring if there is no real danger, which the characters even mention themselves within the game. "Oh, don't worry. They aren't in any danger because of reason XY" is literaly what they say whenever something happens. I know it's probably meant as a power fantasy kind of thing, but other games/stories have done this much better. The girls just look at the MC and fall for him almost instantly (with very minor buildup). Other than that it's not bad for a first try, but I would suggest to not go all Gary Stue in future projects. Make the MC flawed, make them overcome threats and challenges that push them past their limits. Make them also loose, so they can pick themselves up etc, making the payoff better.
Okay, I had posted my own rant back at you but thought better of it, so I am editing it. Anyway, you spent your whole comment on "there's not enough struggle" and "game pacing" (both of which I am fully aware of already). But you never mention what you liked about Serenity. So, no positives at all? I mean, did you think the girls were at least cute? Throw me a bone here! Most reviewers usually give credit for effort on other things and mention what they did like.
Well, anyway... You're entitled to your opinion. Just wish when people post negative tirades in my comments, they would at least put some positives in there as well because I know Serenity isn't THAT bad.
It's your own game. If you like what you've created that's all you really need. If people enjoy your creation/story that's great. Opinions are always subjective. And I never said it was bad... see my sentence "for a first try it's not bad". It's nowhere an awful game, not even close. It's flawed, sure, but you are learning and growing as a creator and writer and will improve (as it does in this project). You have passion for your work, based on your reaction, and that's good. Some storybeats I liked, like Morgana's, but they always felt too rushed or too short, making me wish there were more of those quiet personal moments.
You should have worded your post this way. It sounds much better. Yes, I got a little defensive but it is because I bust my ass on this. And if you followed my Patreon and all the stuff I post out there (I really am a long-winded fucker), you'd know that everything you said has been said so many times now, I just get sick of hearing it. I even said it myself about my own work, and even went back and fixed certain things that I knew I could fix in a pinch. Suffice to say, I listen to reviews, the reviews where the person is actually giving me a proper review and giving me critique that I can actually work with. I note these things down, most devs don't care. I note it down to keep in mind for later updates and my next project.
Anyway, thanks for the reply. Hope you will still check out the final update to this build (this is just chapter 1 - Chapter 2 will come in a few months once my next project gets a first release).