Hey, i listened and i like some parts and other less.
To sum up, i don't think the drum part fit with the mood i want. It's like a march, that make it too much military/industrial. And i am not sure 80's sounds fit as expected.
I would prefer you stay on the description you did before i show you the bandcamp of the other artist. When you said :
"futuristic / electronic layers combined with "primitive" wooden instrument beats to give it a natural-but-alien feel ? :Not too aggresive (because it´s a turn based game), but a little dangerous sounding."
I would like to see almost what you did but with a more natural mood.
Also, t is nice until 00"45. Maybe it could be even more slower for some instruments, for example, space between hi-hats hits could be bigger. I think the same thing but more ambient and a bit more natural could be nice.
Can you send me a mail (contact[at]visumeca[dot]com) in order to share specific aspects of the story that could really help you to match the game feel ?
However it is a good start :) !
Can you tell me if you are ok to work again on that and how much time you can afford on it ?
Thanks !