I haven't played all the other contestants, but I'm pretty sure this is the most beautiful looking entry of the Yaoi Jam 2018. The backgrounds, the character sprites, the menu buttons and text boxes...all the graphics are really top-notch and can easily compete with most commercial releases.
I was a bit surprised when listening to one of the tracks (playing first at the makeover scene with Halim) on head phones and hearing a voice every few seconds, I think it says "preview", so I'm guessing that's a placeholder? Other than that, the soundtrack is flawless.
The setting is pretty unusual for the genre, but still credible. The poem at the beginning is a nice way to set the tone of the game and the art and music really support the atmosphere that you're aiming for.
The writing suits the story and the characters are all interesting so far, with Halim probably being my favorite.Although I have to admit that I kind of skipped the explicit scene at the end. Not because it was bad - the graphics were on the same high level as the rest of the game. I'm just not that interested in this type of scenes. I know the Yaoi Jam is the wrong place to complain about that and both the description and story were clear about it, so I'm not counting that as a downside. Just saying that I'm not the right person to give feedback on that.
Nonetheless, a really impressive demo that I think will please pretty much everyone who's interested in that genre and rating.