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I'm really excited to see where the story goes and hope this feedback helps!

1. The MC didn't come across as partiuclarly feminine, cis, or white- then again we're only one chapter in so that might change? As a brown skinned Latina it's super important to me with customizable games that they don't feel super white-washed. Will skin color/ethnicity change the way people address or speak about you in the regency era or is that avoided? 

2. As for choices in making an MC, again I feel like it's a little soon for me to have a concrete opinion about it. I'm guessing throughout the story we will be given choices/dialogue/reactions that will solidfy our character in the world. I will say the options you gave us in demo were very natural and fitting within the chapter.

3. I didn't catch any spelling errors. As for awkward phrasing I think that's more to do with me having ADHD and getting into the groove of reading, especially if someone has a particular writing style. 

4. I found nothing within the chapter offensive or ignorant. 

I hope everything goes well for you and you can get past any roadblocks in your mind with your writing. I feel the same when i'm writing, the constant overthinking and asking myself if what I've written is good enough. Good luck! :)

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I  feel that it may be an interesting, if not a bit dangerous, choice if the creators made race a factor. So rather than simply ignoring the racism back then, maybe it can be hinted at, perhaps a character has a specific relationship with race and you as the MC can change their views on race as a whole. But obviously, since you're a person of color, your opinion may have more sway than mine. What would you think of my proposition, should it be implemented, from your point of view? (Although I doubt it lol)

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Personally, I wouldn't mind if the racism/race wasn't really mentioned within the game. I can understand why the author wouldn't want to write that, and have read/played games that I really enjoyed that didn't. It definitley would make it more realistic and relatable, but only if done well. As for the MC being a POC and trying to convince/change the mind of the love interest, I (personally) wouldn't want that. Having experienced a lot of conversations with bigoted people it gets really tiring trying to justify your existence (especially to people you care about). Although, that trope is definitley used in fantasy games among the races and I don't mind it as much, probably cause their not real. Thanks for being interested in my thoughts lol :)

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I'm glad to hear it! It's important to me too that the game doesn't feel too white-washed. I want it to feel immersive to everyone, and certainly don't want it to be offensive in any way, but I'm sure I'll make some mistakes along the way, so I'm happy to be corrected. With that being said, no, skin colour and ethnicity won't change how you're treated in this game :)

I'm sure many people struggle with the same, but all we can do is keep writing and keep improving. There's no shortcut. Thank you for the feedback, and the sweet message! ✨🤎

For number 3, it was the same with me, I found there to be no spelling errors. One thing that would help me and maybe a few other people (mainly ADHD people) is more types of fonts. The reason I say that is because with certain kinda fonts ( for contexts me and all my ADHD friends tested this and we all have it severely, including many other things like ADD, Autism, etc.) me and my friends had a hard time reading words with certain fonts(The one the Vahnya has were some of the ones I have a hard time reading). I have no idea how that works, but if someone how It works please let me know, I am curious.