At first I was worried that the narrator was going to take over and dominate the story, but you managed to rein it in for most of it. I found Part 1 the strongest, where the humour really came out in the dialogue between the Intern and the bigwig. IMO the best details of the world were shown through dialogue as well, which isn't easy to do. Liked the scene with the one-way mirror accusation. Pretty impressive work given the time limit!