This is one of the best stories I have read in a long time. I love how you mixed all of the emotions and personalities. The subject matter itself is hard to tell a story about but you pulled it off! I think my only complaint was the ending. Although I realize that the end goal was about Avalon overcoming her trauma, I couldn't help but feel like he ending was rather abrupt. It just left me wanting to see more. I had hoped to see where Eric, Avalon and Dallas (My story arc) would have been down the road. Did Avalon and Eric Marry? Did they have a family? Does Dallas stay with them? Lastly, I liked Avalons hair in the alternate story line much much better than in the main story. She was so much more attractive with her hair down that with it up in that strange braid and short cut.
Please keep turning out the great stories. I have been following a Petal Among Thorns and I love it so far. I plan to pick up a Penny for your Thoughts very soon.
Thank you, GunDriver! Avalon was very much a practice novel for me. I learned a lot from making it. I do hope to touch on what happens in the future for them but for now it's a mystery. I changed a few things about Avalon for the What If..? version and she looked much better. I wish I had made her that way from the beginning. As I said, I learned a lot and that's why Petal is so darling.
I'm going to keep working on these novels for as long as I can. I appreciate your support and your kind words.