ฅ/ᐠ｡ᆽ｡ᐟ \ ~Hello~
I'm glad you made a new version for this!
I remember playing the original game a while back, and seeing improvements in the dialogue along with additional content definitely gives this a more superior and stranger atmosphere than the original. The new backgrounds/environments was especially nice since, if I remember correctly, the original had very little changes in settings.
I do think it would've been nice to tweak the pacing a bit to add more tension, but at the same time I think this was well executed as you're sticking closely to the original story and formula without changing too much. Overall, I thought it was a nifty story and had a fun time reading it, so good job! I liked this.