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Honestly loving it so far, I just have a couple of grammatical gripes. I also really want more of Max he's a blast, but I love the individuality of the whole cast thus far. If my constructive criticism isn't too harsh, I can provide a few more examples for you, there aren't too many glaring mistakes, but I saw a few in my first go around.

In the example below the dialog goes "Usually, If I were to example get a new colleague or if we'd start a new big project at work we'd do something like a kick off." 

However, I believe you meant for it to be: 

"Usually, If I were to *for example get a new colleague or if we'd start a ** big project at work we'd do something *** like that to kick it off"

*" to example" doesn't make any sense grammatically, but if we follow the 'to' with a 'for' that will be fixed. I think you meant to do this. .You could also remove 'to' entirely and put in 'for' in its place, but for what I think you were going for, it is unnecessary.

** Kind of just a personal gripe, nothing technically wrong here. Nevertheless, since we have the word 'start' proceeding the adjective/noun phrase 'new big project' , we can see that 'new' is redundant  as start comes right before and therefore can be removed.

*** Since we're talking about a social event(s), it makes sense to address 'it' as such, In the case you meant 'kick off' as in the sports term that is being applied, uhh, my bad.


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Thanks for all the kind words! I'll take a look through this properly before launching the update. I'm always happy to receive feedback on my grammar and whatnot.

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How soon is the update?

Wondering if I should catch up on 0.5 now, or play 0.6 when it's out.

Assuming you actually have a say in how productive you can be, unlike me who just has to see when the time comes.

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Hi,

As of now I'd say I'm halfway there, I want to say first week of August. Buuuut, I have a history of pushing it when proofreading and rewriting entire scenes so take it with a grain of salt and expect it in the middle of August.

As for catching up on 0.5, if you're going Mike's route I'd say go for it. There are some small changesto Mike's route in 0.6 but nothing story changing, just adding more detail.

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I'm really enjoying all the reflection and philosophical moments as well. Keep up the good work!