The image already draws me forward into the tale. So impressive that you wrote almost all of it in rhyme! Tolkien incorporates poetry so well into his stories, and I like to see how narrative can be wound into rhyme. Rhyme can be a tricky way of adding connection and meaning to stories.
I found it eloquent of you to use both witch and fae to work the rhyme scheme. I’m curious about what final decision the player will make and what effect that will have. I start to imagine a narrative in which it would be beneficial to stay at the grave of your queen, and that is an intriguing idea.