This is your first attempt at NaNoRenO which I'm guessing is your first attempt at visual novels. I do have to say you nailed it quite well. I do have plenty of visual novel experience under my let's play belt on my main channel. Raithias There are some nit pick things to mention though. Such as, the sudden drop of background music from time to time. I believe this was to draw atmosphere but, I think it just made for too long of akward dead space of no sounds. The other thing that many visual novel artist catch the bane of is choices. This visual novel although very well done seems to only have very few choices. Players really like to have options to advance the story. That's the only things I think could be improved upon. You did great and, I hope your submission does well in NaNoRenO!