Such a lovely update! it toke me a few hours to get it through with a few breaks, I finally decided to play it on my computer since the save doesn't work for me on phone lol, I feel quite nostalgic for the green aesthetic background, I though it was lovely, may I ask why you changed it? the black and white doesn't feel as inviting and lively as the green and feels lifeless, considering this game is filled with so much live <333.
Ben and Alex: Nothing noteworthy about them, to the point that both of them feel like the same character and only the name was changed for them but I felt some distinct differences for them in some passages otherwise they really did seem the same character. Are you using them as a catalyst for the mc to ease themselves into the different routes? is that why they felt indistinguishable? I'm keeping in mind that I have not done Joana route yet so I can't speak for its characteristics and tone of the route and its supporting characters. I'll probably play it tomorrow.
I also seemed to have found a pronoun error for Alex in which you referred to them as “he’ his” even though in all the other passages they are referred to using they/them pronouns so just letting you know that.
The paths: I though they were going to be a bit different but the ones I’ve done were eerily similar and only had slight vibrations of differences, both Elya and Ian routes were similar to one another. I don’t know if that was a choice or not.
Also from what I noticed, both Ian and Elya flashback story was again quite the same with only slight variation changed for them, nothing unique with the way the flashback dream was done, both seem to have the same motivation for how they felt about the mc in the solutions they give to the mc present tense, Some examples “You were my only friend” “A gift that was sent to me” “I came to hate you” if I as a reader hasn’t spend quite a while with them in the beginning and didn’t get to know their inner voice and speech patterns than I would’ve mistaken them for the same character, I am in no way saying that they are the same but am only acknowledging that their routes were quite similar only in the way they responded to the mc with the dream sequence and that only. Both are equally quite diverse and lovely characters with such distinctive voices so it felt a bit jarring when their response to the mc with their nightmare was line by line the same.
I contemplated writing this and I really do hate writing such harsh notes for my favorite authors, I never write them and is this the kind of feedback you are looking for? I hate to be overstepping my boundaries.
May I also ask what's the word count for the current demo? it felt really long or it might have been me playing really slow.
