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I'm so glad! Thank you sooo much for playing and for your detailed feedback ♥♥♥

About Mandra: To be honest, my initial plan was to show this lack of dominance as a lack of experience and a personality that's not fully shaped... but considering the other dialogues, the elements for a more dominant side were already there, right? :'((( Mandra's scene must've felt quite jarring because of that.

I'll go back to that scene and implement it a little so it can still show we're 5 years in the past (so a less experienced MC), but still considering the dominance inherent to them.

Thank you again for pointing that out! ♥ :)

Erized3 years ago (1 edit) (+1)

The fact that it happened 5 years in the past and MC may be less confident in what he/she/they could get away with in the face of royalty is an important point to consider, which I sort of hadn't. Although as you said, I was going with the dialogue indicators that RP'ed that personality best, which is why that bit stood out to me. Anyway, thank you for taking my feedback into consideration! :)

Also, I wanted to say, being able to get closer to Mandra in this side-story has made me even more interested in doing a main-story play-through focused around romancing them. I really hope that will be a possibility at some stage. I've always liked Mandra and their personality, but experiencing the moment that lays bare their insecurity and vulnerabilities, and what MC and they have in common in that way, was so beautifully done. I just want to explore so much more of this dynamic between them, and perhaps how their shared experience fighting in the war, and MC's (potentially) still existing grudge to Mathias's betrayal, bonds MC and Mandra in a way Mathias can't touch no matter how much he may want to. <3

In any case, you've really got me hooked! All love and good vibes to you as you continue with this charming story! :)

Ligia Nunes3 years ago(+1)

Of course! I'm glad you pointed that out, actually. Please continue giving me great feedback; I want this story to be the best it can be ♥

And I can't express how happy I am that you feel that way towards Mandra. ♥♥♥ The whole 1st book (the first 4 chapters of the story) focuses on Mathias as an LI and the blooming ceremony--when he'll receive his crown. The story itself happens in a 4-day span xD so there's a lot of opportunity after that for a different focus. I'm still wondering how to deal with Book #2, but people rly seem taken with our Mandreis, so... it's definitely a possibility haha

Erized3 years ago (2 edits) (+1)

I can't really blame people being taken by Mandreis - especially after everything that went on in that side-story, and that personality! In the main story I liked Mandra's sassiness and daring nature next to the MC, and the clear bitterness they hold towards Mathias for all their older brother's pampering and naivety - the flaws and complexity in this character made them fun to get to know, and I wanted to learn more. However, it was during the newest side-story that Mandra truly captured my heart, to the point where I knew my MC would probably go as far as forsaking his precious knightly vows (in at least one playthrough, if possible), just so he could give Mandra all the love and care they'd never had for all those years. Corny af? Yes - but every word the truth. xD

I also wanted to say, it doesn't take much to recognize the care you put into creating these characters and the story surrounding them, nor the deep love you have for your characters, nor even the attention to providing the reader with an experience they can really make their own and feel connected to. The (potential) LIs quickly feel precious to us, and there are not many MC's that feel as attractive to embody as the Dragon Commander, who you've given so much roleplayability, while never sacrificing the character's soul. That takes some skill, and is worth recognizing. I know you're already getting a lot of love for your good work, but hey, you deserve it, so have some more anyway. Never have enough love~ :D// <3<3

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