Interesting cast and concept! Seems a bit abrupt to be making route decisions when you barely get to know the characters, which causes me to fall back on Willem for being a known friend. I'm not sure if this is route related to in part how the story plays out or romantic though, which would make a difference in my judgement.
The translation to English only had a few errors. Biggest issue is that you need to recheck the entire script for/because of he/she, the wrong pronouns got used a lot.