Pretty cool world you have created here. The story has an element of surprise that makes it very engaging (didn't expect to get shot for sleeping in lol). Anyway, it seems like you are planning on expanding this game so I have a few suggestions to make the game experience better:
- Sound effects and ambient noise/music would improve the immersion a lot.
- If the game is to be left in this Ink player mode, you should increase the height of the game window so the player can see further back in the story. Occasionally, text will even go offscreen as soon as it appears.