Huh. Very odd, but in a good way. This story doesn't quite feel complete, though; is that because of the word limit? This was just a weird experience, but I kinda liked it. An expansion of this story, or another Twine story with this character (WHY did he have a gun and shoot the waiter?! Will that blind date ever call back?!) would be great.
(btw, I'm in this Twine Jam, too! My game is HCF.)