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The visuals and panel layout are a masterpiece!
Dino is a fun foil. I like how ze teases Avery for chickening out on something that ze can't do anyway.
I enjoyed the worldbuilding, but there is not enough 'show, don't tell.' in this first episode. Especially the reference to 'clicks,' would be improved by just integrating the money context into the dialog. For example, Avery: "five clicks was a lot of money for us back then!"
I had trouble reading the font, though it got easier by the end. I also would have preferred an e-reader layout as opposed to the print layout.

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Thanks a bunch for such an in depth comment! I know I'm replying to this 2 years too late but when I read the comment initially it really stuck with me, and has made me consider it in a lot of things I create now! I hope you'll enjoy future epsiodes when they (eventually) arrive!